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  Posted: January 3, 2021      Views: 201
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Chapter 4 of the book A Pragnant Ghost
The ghost's parents opened the coffin and found no body.
"Pregnant Ghost" by Goodadvicechan

Background
A young couple committed suicide. The female ghost was pregnant and she wanted to find a father for her baby. Tom was haunted by the ghost and was threatened to be the father.


Chapter 4

Tom Tsang : a journalist
Mary : Tom's girlfriend
Chow Siu Feng : Pregnant Ghost
Ho Siu Ming : Siu Feng's boyfriend
Mr. and Mrs. Chow: Siu Feng's parents
Mr. and Mrs. Ho: Siu Ming's parents
Tsoi Tsoi : Siu Feng's close Servant
Veronica: Mary's grandmother
Grandma Miu Miu : Beat the Devil Specialist
Grandma Ling : Ghost Communicator
Monk Kong : Ghost Buster
Ah Fook : Male Servent
Ah Kiu : Female Servant
Ghost Number 12 : Siu Feng's Grandfather

Note: Chinese name, surname first

Chapter 1 : Tom bought a picture of a beautiful girl dressed in red Chinese Wedding gown. The girl came out of the picture and talked to Tom every night.

Chapter 2. The ghost attacked Tom's girlfriend, Mary, causing her to become unconscious. Monk Kong ( Ghost buster) failed to capture the ghost.

Chapter 3. Parents of Siu Feng and Siu Ming disapproved their requested dead person marriage.

Chapter 4

The Chow graveyard was on a small hill behind the House of Chow. There were about 13 graves; each one marked with a number. The number was engraved on the ground. Siu Feng's grave was marked number 13. It was a simple tombstone while others had more fancy decorations. Some of them had a pavilion with the grave in the center. There was a common burning area for burning paper money and any other paper material things; cars, houses, furniture, hand bags, clothes, etc.

When our group of Mrs. Chow, Mrs. Ho, Grandma Ling, I and six male servants and Ah Kiu arrived, an alter table with a chair was already set up. On the alter table were a container with three pieces of big incense, three cups of wine, three cups of tea, and three plates of fruits. The chair was reserved for Grandma Ling.

There were additional chairs about six feet away from the alter table reserved for Mrs. Chow, Mrs. Ho and me. We sat down and Grandma Ling walked forward, asking us to think of Siu Feng and quietly recite the following spooky sentences: "Spirit show yourself, spirit reveal, spirit come to me so I know you are real!"

Meanwhile the servants lit the red Chinese candles located around the alter table. I guessed this was to trap the Ghost within the circle. Mrs. Chow whispered to me. "Mr. Tsang, Siu Feng will be in Grandma Ling's body. If you have questions, ask her. "

"I don't see Siu Feng."

"What?"

"Nothing."

After telling us what to do, Grandma Ling walked around the alter table throwing round paper money with a square hole in the middle symbolizing coin money of the olden days. She then started burning the incense, sitting down on the chair, sprinkling some salt around the circle of candles, chanting, "I summon you, Chow Siu Feng, born on the seventh day of the seven month, to here. I command you stay in my circle of safety. I summon you so your mother can ask you questions."

Black clouds brought darkness as they crept over the moon. Grandma Ling screamed and non stop quivered, her eyes widening and turning into green.

Mrs. Chow said. "Are you Siu Feng?"

Grandma Ling said nothing but continued shaking her body. I looked around, I didn't see Siu Feng but saw a few other ghosts busy walking around.

Mrs. Ho said. "Miss Chow, tell us it's you."

"Mrs. Ho, I am carrying Siu Ming's baby. Please approve our marriage." Grandma Ling said.

Mrs. Ho was scared, shocked, and said nothing.

"Siu Feng, mama missed you a lot. Tell me what can I do for you?"

"My body was separated from my spirit. Mama, you have to find my body."

"Where's your body?"

" I have no idea."

"Poor baby." Mrs. Chow cried and Mrs. Ho put her hand on Mrs. Chow's hand to comfort her.

I didn't know what to say but noticed Grandma Ling's green eyes becoming brighter.

All of a sudden, lightning struck Siu Feng's grave and broke her tombstone into pieces. Grandma Ling woke up, walked towards Mrs. Chow, and said, "What did Miss Siu Feng say to you?"

"Her body was separated from her spirit."

Grandma Ling whispered something to Mrs. Chow, grabbed her hand and walked towards the broken grave. Mrs. Ho, I and the rest of the group followed.

The ground was broken open and we could see the dirty coffin. Grandma Ling said, "Miss Siu Feng's body is gone. There's is nothing inside."

Mrs. Ho said. "What? How could that be?"

"She told me so." Grandma Ling replied.

I looked around for Siu Feng but couldn't see her.

Grandma Ling said. "If no one believes in me, let's open the coffin." She then whispered something in Mrs. Chow's ears.

Mrs. Chow said, " Ah Fook, get the tools ready and get some help from the others. Open the coffin."

Mrs. Ho was shocked and speechless.

Ah Kie said,. "Mrs. Chow, do we need to discuss this with Master Chow?"

"No."

The male servants opened the coffin and found no dead body; only a red silk scarf. They handed it to Mrs. Chow. Mrs Chow said. "It was Siu Feng's wedding scarf."

A strong breeze blew away the scarf. Mrs. Chow chased it, tripped on the ground and lost consciousness. Ah Kiu rushed to carry Mrs Chow back to the house. Mrs. Ho followed.

I continued to chase the scarf. Halfway up the hill, I bumped into a ghost.

"I'm sorry."

"Don't worry, young man. That doesn't hurt. But you have to come back and I'll tell you who took Siu Feng's body. I am number 12. Here is the scarf you are looking for." He then disappeared.

I looked at the scarf, remembering Siu Feng wearing a black scarf, and wondered why it wasn't black.

My phone rang and Veronica on the line. "Tom, Mary moved her lips. She struggled to tell me something but I didn't understand what she said. But a nurse heard two words -- find me. You better come back now."

"I'll come home as soon as possible. How is Mary doing?"

"She calmed down, sleeping now."

"I'll see whether I can catch the last train else see you tomorrow. Good night."

*****

Mr. and Mrs. Chow requested me to stay behind and help them to look for Siu Feng's body. I had no interest in any part of it but wanted to go back to Shanghai to see Mary.

The last train had left and I had no choice but to stay at the haunted hotel. Again I was the only guest. This time I asked for a urinal.

I had an early dinner before I retired to my room. I made a call to Veronica and told her that I would take the earliest train home next day. She said Mary had no further progress but still unconscious.

In the middle of my sleep, someone knocked on my door. I ignored it. Who would come to see me at this late hour? The knocking continued. I opened the door but found no one. I went downstairs. There was no one there either.

I went back to my room and saw Siu Ming sitting in my room.

"You are not welcome. Why are you here?" I said.

"I don't care whether I'm welcome or not. I'm here and you can't do anything about it."

"What do you want?"

"I want you to help look for Siu Feng's body."

"Why can't you do it?"

"I did but couldn't find her body."

"Um... If you couldn't find it, what makes you think I can?"

"You can go back to the graveyard now and talk to Siu Feng's relatives. One of them might have seen who took the body."

"Why didn't you talk to them?"

"I did. None of them liked me. They blamed me for Siu Feng's death."

"No. I'm not going to do that. I'm going home tomorrow."

Siu Ming knelt down to beg me to do it. I turned my back towards him and said, "No, no, no..."

Someone hit my head from the back, and I fell on the floor unconscious.

*****

When I woke up, my head was covered with a bag, my mouth was taped, and both my hands and feet were tied.

I struggled to get myself free but could hardly move. I found myself being tied to a post.

"There is no use to move." I heard a somewhat familiar voice. I was convinced I have heard of this voice before. It wasn't Siu Ming's. Who could he be? What could he want from me?"

"You are a trouble maker. Our town is quiet and peaceful. Since your arrival, the whole town is disturbed by the news that you are the matchmaker for Siu Ming and Siu Feng. Why do you want to do that? Both of them are already dead."

I could say nothing; my mouth was taped.

"Let me tell you where you are. You are now in a temporary mosque while a new one being built. You could ask the corpses to save your life. Good luck."

I heard him leave the place. I was scared and the darkness frightened me. I wanted to yell for help but I couldn't. I tried to kick my feet. That didn't help. I rubbed the hands tied at the back against the post. That bruised my hands and blood transpired into drops falling on the floor. I was so scared of the unknown that I started wetting my pants. I banged my head on the post. A voice said. "Can I help you?" I had no way to answer the voice but continued banging my head till I fainted.

*****

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The book continues with Pregnant Ghost Chapter 5. We will provide a link to it when you review this below.

Author Notes
Many Chinese marriage culture and ghost communication practices took place in this ghost story.

In general, Chinese address old men as grandpa and old women as grandma even though they are not related.

PS: Sorry Book Name should be Pregnant Ghost

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