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 Category:  General Poetry
  Posted: March 13, 2016      Views: 587
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I am recently retired and reside in the most beautiful area of Virginia--the Shenandoah Valley. I find beauty and inspiration in the mountains every day--it is one of my most faithful muses.

I love to write poetry and have been writing for - more...

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Chapter 14 of the book 2016
A poem of friendship and remembrance for a friend
"tanka suite (eaglets)" by mountainwriter49

tanka suite (eaglets)
For Bob, and his brother Larry

flourish in parents’ nest
throughout our lives--
brothers through thick and thin

young eagles leave
nest to find their way
fledgling wings
matured and took us
along different paths

daffodils and hyacinths
sprout each spring in mama’s garden
of brothers
at the old homestead

lavender crocus
blooms emerge on March morning
love and life through God’s grace
is his forevermore

warm waters flow
over hand-hewn dam
of our time together
wash o’er me as I weep

I sit by lake’s edge
and gaze upon brilliant sunrise
of your soul and
renaissance of my life to come


8 March 2016...

Tanka Poetry Contest contest entry


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Author Notes
POETIC FORM: Tanka Suite
Tanka is an ancient Japanese short poetic form. It lends itself well to poems with emotive impact. In fact, it has been referred to as the Japanese equivalent of the sonnet. Tanka is 31 syllables or less in a five line poem conforming to the short/long/short/long/long structure. Often times on FanStory, one reads that tanka is a 5-7-5-7-7 poem. This is simply not true.

Tanka has three component parts as follows: 1) haiku-like first three lines utilizing a natural theme to set the tone for the rest of the tanka; 2) line 3 serves as the satori/ah-ha moment of the first two lines and most importantly, also as a pivot line to begin lines 4 & 5. It is lines 3,4 & 5 that form the emotive impact of tanka. In tanka, nature may be personified; however, as in haiku, word efficiency and effectiveness and using punctuation and capitalization sparingly is admired.

A tanka suite is a grouping of several tanka developed to tell a more complete story. With that said, each tanka must be able to stand on its own.

An old college friend's brother passed away last week after a difficult fight with cancer. He was only 68. His younger brother, Bob, my friend, survives. This poem is for Bob and his brother Larry. The tanka is written as though Bob is the narrator.

Thank you for reading my poetry.


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