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milushka
 
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Rating of Chapter 6 -
An Earnest View
What can I say - a perfect piece - I wouldn't go into the structure, know little about it but the content is powerful, though said over and over in poems and in prose and still it goes on and on. Isn't Phoenix getting tired of being reborn again and again and all in vain?
Milushka


 Comment Written 22-Aug-2006



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2006
    He should be, milushka. :) Thank you.
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alwayshasapen
 
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You are the bomb. I have never used that expression in my whole life until this moment...flawless piece. Loved it, gonna read it again right now, Thanks.


 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2006
    Thank you very much.
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milushka
 
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Rating of Chapter 2 -
A Deeper Dish
You write such amazing poetry - no need to say, I love it. The imagery great, the contrast built, fitting words - great story, touching. Nothing I would change. Thank you.
Milushka

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 Comment Written 11-Aug-2006



reply by the author on 11-Aug-2006
    Thank you.

reply by milushka on 11-Aug-2006

    So sorry, I wanted to give it 5 stars or six, must be my eyesite, don't understant how that happened. How do I fix that for I am so new at this site, don't know how things work?

    Milushka


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2006
    No problem. Just go to the poem and scroll down to the box. You can select the five, hit enter, and it'll replace the other score. Thanks.

reply by milushka on 12-Aug-2006

    That is all so easy to say, I forgot how I found it in the first place.

    Computer illiterate me.

    Milushka


reply by the author on 12-Aug-2006
    Just click on the poem title. It'll take you there.
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Hhays
 
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Primary Cares
This was absolutely awesome! You just won my vote, I think, marginally over the Avalon poem. I still have one more selection to read but I'll probably end up voting for yours. Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 22-May-2006


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It is so sad when a couple that has been together for so many years finally faces the effects of old age. I liked this poem because it reminded me of my grandparents' relationship over the last few years before life let them slip away. Beautiful but sad. The dedication between these couples is so wonderful.


 Comment Written 22-May-2006


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mblundell68
 
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Primary Cares
Primary Cares;
An ancient love song;
that what it says to me!
Beauty in its words, yet having a soft touch of patience and release!
Good writing!


 Comment Written 21-May-2006


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Senyai
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Beautiful, just beautiful, Marillion. Is this about your mother and father perhaps? The poem picks up so well, the way it goes with a loving couple in older age, that I just felt that you had to know these two of which you write. Very well done, and good luck in the contest.

Foxey


 Comment Written 21-May-2006


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Liilia
 
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Primary Cares
Your poem builds a clear picture to me of a gentle wife caring for a sick older husband. It is a bit puzzling which the golden years were wrecked twice and why the name Claire came up so late in the poem. Other than that, it is very lovely with expressions such as "haloed by silver in her feathered hair" and "shadow of a burdened saint."


 Comment Written 20-May-2006


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Hetty
 
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Rating of Chapter 6 -
An Earnest View
Hi Dave,
Just thought I would pop in for a cup of tea.. This is a lovely poem and has a good strong message, the only problem with it for me was the lack of fullstops.. I found it a bit of a breathless read but its very well penned.

The use of hidden rhyming here is similar to mine (or mine is similar to yours) especially in my latest poems. Personally, I like the structure of trad. verse with the free verse hidden rhyme to give it the perfect compromise between the both.

I find when rhyming like this, the rhythm creates itself.

Excellent, mate
Hetty


 Comment Written 18-May-2006


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Dreamdancer
 
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Rating of Chapter 11 -
Broken Homes
Hello My friend,
The tale of the world today as the poor get poorer and rich get richer. This happened to my parents-- uprooted in the name of making money. Awesome read my friend... Buddy


 Comment Written 17-May-2006


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