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Write of Passage


An Homage to Summer of '42

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ScarletAffliction
 
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I love a poem that tells a good story and I can tell you're going somewhere great with this. (If not a bit American Pie) hehehe. I'll be easily entertained by this trio I'm sure as you delve deeper into the story.

Great write. :)


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2006



reply by the author on 07-Oct-2006
    Thank you again, sweets.
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fanlight
 
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I enjoyed reading this Marillion - it made me smile - I have two brothers and as a teenager I saw them get up to things they should not - plus the reading of illicit magazines and sniggers with their pals - had not read the first part to this so went and read that to - made an excellent read - thank you for sharing - Fanlight x


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you very much, fanlight.
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Hello Marillion, I am not familiar with the book you are writing on but it's interesting having a teen son and seeing the similarities in what you write...
we call them scallywags here as long as they don't get too outta line ;-D

be well

lerk


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you very much, lerkun. I appreciate it.
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Diny
 
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That was so funny! I so get it- I even found one in my Dads drawer once but I didn't tell anyone... Oh and The sears catalogue underwear section used to have me mesmorized for hours! haha
Write on David- hugs Diny


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you, my friend.
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Diny
 
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A fine poem in style ans length- Now I shall have to go back and read part one- I have been a bit off lately as my PC cable modem was down....drat! Now I have something to look forward to the begining and the continuing saga... hugs and as always Write on...DINY


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you again, my friend.
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Lady Jane
 
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Interesting. I guess I need to read chapter one...then follow with chapter three to see just what kind of mischief these scalawags can get themselves into. As if I need to ask :) Great work here. Follows form and flows fluidly. Janelle


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you, Janelle.
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Remembering the film was fun in itself and you did a beautiful job of using poetry to except the part you chose to deal with in this chapter.

You used a language that fit the temper of the times in which the film was set.

I found just one word that hit me as something you might want to look at. It is one of those words for which you could say, it is the right word, but in my opinion it is not the best word:

HIT their teens. Yeah, everybody says it, so it is a bit cliche. It also misrepresents what happens. We do not wake up one morning and find that we are teens splattered all over the sands of time. We more slide into them, ease into them, wake up in them .... Just an opinion. It doesn't take away from the fact that this is a well done piece.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you very much, simon. I agree and will find something more suitable.
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 Comment Written 22-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    LOL, Miss Pen. Thank you very much.
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Even though this is a book report (oh do I remember those, from grade school - you just reminded me of a friend who read the dictionary because every hundred pages was good for one book's-worth of credit!) your verse is smooth, solid, charming, and a complete joy.

Best regards, Gil


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you so much, Gil. I really appreciate it.
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Donaya Haymond
 
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I have no connection or familiarity with the subject matter, which I think wouldn't be interesting for a girl anyway, but the poem itself is technically well-written and smooth.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you, my dear. Always a pleasure.
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