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A Quarter For Julie's Brow


Buster is on a quest he doesn't fully understand

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Gypsy Blue Rose
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Pulled Along By the Tug of the Fates
I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format and picture that enhanced the story. Good job!


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
    Thanks Gypsy Blue Rose. That's very kind of you. I'm so happy you enjoyed the story.
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Pulled Along By the Tug of the Fates
Really liked this. Very well written, and funny at times. Was too involved to check for sprags. Knowing you, it probably is none. Smile.

I smile at his audacity. "I'm fucking sticking you up, Autry! You expect me to give you my name?"[LOL]

One thing remains. It is not of this day. It is not of any day. Nor is it at all connected with time in my mind. But it remains, nonetheless, drifting inexorably, as timeless as stars, as solidly rooted as myth and symbol. Unresisting, it is one with the force that pulls it along, unerringly, until it drops off into that boundless, borderless eternal.

I watch it drift through my mind with dread and longing. [Great ending paragraphy and line.}


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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
    Thanks, Ama. I'm glad it resonated with you. I think more FanStorians have enjoyed this short story than any I've posted. The next one will be less intense with the viewpoint character being about 10 years old. Again, thanks.
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Pulled Along By the Tug of the Fates
That was a very good read. You are a very talented story teller. And it certainly ended much different than I thought it would. But then again I also thought it was a complete different story. That is my excuse at least.
I enjoyed it a lot. Well done. Ulla


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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
    Thank you for the high praise, Ulla. I'm happy you enjoyed this to the extent you did.
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This is a very poignant conclusion. Jul, in the form of the coin, did get to sail away as she always wanted.
I enjoyed the back and forth comedic section between Autry and Buster.(Clever how they got their names. LOL)
Money didn't mean a thing to our hero. His allegiance to his girl friend was all that mattered.
I do get that he had to rob Autry as a tribute to Julie, because that's what he and Julie did, trying to get money for a ship. He couldn't accept the replica as a gift.


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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
    Ellen, You nailed it! Thanks for your lovely crit and the gracious rating. You honor me!
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Hey,
so what is real after all?
I am having a case of the writers sads.....and am droppping by for a bit.
So, the sadness to this was tangible for me.
And in the end what is real, and what do we beleive and why oh why do we hurt those who hold a hand...
Good story, I liked the detail and I liked the way the characters 'plaed' each other.
The interaction kept me reading, the interaction of two people playing out their pain.
padumachitta


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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
    Good to have you drop by, Padumachitta and leave your kind comments and generous rating. Yes, there are a lot of questions over what is and what isn't real.
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Hmm, that was a long journey to say goodbye for a friend. It appears you dipped deeply into fantasy in this one, with Buster not being killed or imprisoned. Well told.


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
    Thanks,I wouldn't really consider it fantasy. I can imagine it all happening, in the sense it's within the realm of possibility. Lance. Glad you enjoyed it. LOL, Kinda.
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G'day Jay. Great work once again mate. You always paint the scenes and dramas so vividly and as always the dialogue is perfect. You have the unique laid back writing style that I really enjoy as well. But in the end I guess they got the ship. Very enjoyable Sir. Cheers Fez


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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Fez. Always glad to have you aboard.
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hello jay, I enjoyed reading this chapter, but the ending left me a little confused. autry disappeared as well as the pawnshop and burger king? like dealing with it just left everything void in his mind?


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
    Thanks for your generous rating and your candid remarks. Yes, you pretty much nailed it. They didn't physically disappear, though Autry, left his position at the door. Everything was discharged from his mind, just as the schooner disappeared down the drain.
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This is exceptional writing and a riveting close to a spectacular story. I enjoyed the conflict. Autry was as gentle as Buster was as cruel, and yet Autry saw through Buster's coarseness to the pain in his soul. Grief does odd things to people. Buster's twisted logic was "without focus or borders." I love how that carved schooner took on the metaphor of representing Julie's dream of steeling a yacht. This is a beautiful and sad story whose words ache with pain, loneliness and grief that felt real and engaged my heart.

Thank you for sharing. If I had a six left I would have given it to you. Thank you for sharing your prolific imagination and creativity.


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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
    Andre, you home in on the deeper meaning of this short story--or the meaning I hoped to convey. I didn't even know the deeper layers when I had finished it. I had to grow into it. Thank you so much for your mind and soul.

reply by Sis Cat on 27-Jun-2015
    Thank you. Your haibun deserves frame worthy review.

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
    Hee-hee. Hmmmm, I don't do no Haibun, though.
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stupidly, childishly cruel?
(yeah, I wondered the same. It's weird to watch.)

"I needed it to stick you up and get the schooner."
(I paused here. The logic .... poor Autry.)

I'm fucking robbing from you."
(why not? If Buster is robbing him for something he could have paid for, seems perfectly sensible Autry should be able to make a gift of it.)

Sitting at the curb, I lay the schooner beside me[,] while removing my sneakers and socks. (no comma, I don't think)


Now, I wonder if it's losing its fine edge. : 0 <-- that was my face, I think.

Well, I think my reaction to the end of this story can only be expressed in an analogy. I am a princess. This story is layered beneath 19 mattresses. And as I lie above all the layers, I will not get a good night's sleep, it cannot be ignored, and the fact that the effect is there does not make sense.

This story is a phase click to the right, such that it itches my bones. Parts of my brain wrap around and ... other parts want to shake it off like, like an unexpected piece of algae in a swimming pool that clings to your arm, and you weren't expecting it and there's a shudder and physical jerking. It's a good thing grungy brad pit pulled off this ... thing ... this, off one phase click to the right.

I could see this in published setting. I could see an editor, or whatever big pants, stuck in that hesitant pause of ... what just happened here ... was I just too beneath the vision ... or did that just boggle my brain with warped logic into making sense.



 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015



reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015


    Now, I wonder if it's losing its fine edge. : 0 <-- that was my face, I think. [I thing you're heart's in the graphic novel! Hee-hee.]

    This story is a phase click to the right, such that it itches my bones. Parts of my brain wrap around and ... other parts want to shake it off like, like an unexpected piece of algae in a swimming pool that clings to your arm, [So... you kinda like it, but you don't like kinda liking it? Or of course, the reverse.

    I would love to get this into the hands of such an editor, to boggle his brain with this warped logic--and don't think I'm not aware that it's warped. It's never made complete sense to me.

    Turtle, you amaze when you take me along with your journey of discovery, and brilliant though the journey is, when it's through I need to look up and see the glow of the chartreuse cross to assure myself you liked it. I'll take it as a yes! Thank you my dear Turtle.


reply by --Turtle. on 27-Jun-2015
    It's very hard to describe my reaction. I both really liked it, and really wanted to throw it across the room, and really liked that I wanted to throw it. I'm starting to think if I owned a bound Anthology from you, it would have to be very well-bound as it would be thrown many times, because I would want to throw it. And I don't mean that as an insult, because if I didn't like it, it would be gently placed aside and forgotten.

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
    Great! At least I'll count on your buying the bound copy!
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