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The Griffydam Tales


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Y. M. Roger
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Wow -- you are two meters tall (the guy with black hair from chapter one)? :) And I count 49...but, admittedly, some of them are repeats. Oh, and I counted 'number words' too because, technically, they are mathematical terms. No, I didn't keep a tally, just counted as I skimmed, so no test points allowed! :) :) Quite fun and I'll have to be sure to catch the next installment! :) ;) I've included a few grammatical catches below - employ or ignore as you like. :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette

careers off the --> careens off the

one, who purely --> one - who purely

butterfly, and my --> butterfly, or my

math nerd two -> math nerd, too


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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    Yvette,

    Glad to hear from you again.

    Let's be serious - am not a math nerd myself. Did physics at uni and
    could not cope with the math aspect. [another story bubbles up!].

    The grammar:

    1. careens is a new word to me. In England we have the common expression "the car careered off the road" ie the prelude to a nasty crash;

    2 point taken;

    3 should be 'and' as there are three things added. Deliberate use of two 'ands' that equate to the plus sign;
    overriding grammar is part of the humor [we say humour];

    4 deliberate typo to get another math term in. hahaha.

    Yes, am planning another purely platonic chapter [3],
    and possibly a further chapter 4 that's a non-platonic alternative,
    for romantically inclined readers. Closer to my heart as well.

    Go well,

    Thanks,

    Richard.

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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    Yvette,

    Yes you are right about point 3. It is better as 'or,'
    and have altered my text.


    Though I originally meant it as +and+and+, it's ok as: n or n or n.

    Thanks,

    Richard.
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Rob Caudle
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Ahhhh.....a breath of fresh air! Yes, I think I caught all the terms of my most hated subject--MATH! So, I know you said "don't read it," but it's impossible not to when you put it like that. Hilarious use of language and play on words. Look forward to the next one. I'll never tell if he's in China.


 Comment Written 09-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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    Thanks Rob for this review.

    I was having palpitations my Reviewers would get lost in thick jungle,
    and get eaten by the pythagorases.

    Thanks,

    Richard
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Sorry, I'm not a maths nerd, in fact I think I may actually be dyslexic when it comes to maths, so as much as lot of this (as you stated In your blerb) didn't make sense to me, I love the humour in this and it actually made me smile. I have a very quirky sense of humour so this appeals me so much that I actually contemplated googling all the terms I didn't recognise to try and make sense of it haha..it was like reading something a cross between Sheldon Cooper and The Doctor (Doctor Who I mean) would write.. it sure why I made that comparison but that's what sprung to mind..anyway I'm sorry if I have offended you by reviewing but I did enjoy what I could understand.. lol.


 Comment Written 09-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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    Babykoala,

    Thanks for your great review.

    The math terms I use are mainly nonsense like

    'the land where the bong tree grows' etc.

    I plan another few chapters re mathematician, then to move to lawyers, accountants, flower arrangers etc.

    It's a b****y life time's work!

    Ms Thesaurus gives me all the words.

    I hammer them into a nonsense story.

    The pepper pot throws in a sprinkling of humour.

    That's all. B.Simple.

    In fact, that's a great pen name, "Amby Simple," the well known author.

    Thanks,

    Richard.

    PS Apologies for straying off the point,
    and not maintaining my normal professional rectitude.

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The Mathematician's Tale
Your vocabulary is incredible! Wow! I think at some points, the descriptions were a bit hefty and I was a bit confused about the spacing, but I found this very humorous and fun to read :)


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Thanks for your great review.

reply by Abby Baker on 08-Jan-2019
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I like this. The picture is awesome. This is cute. The things guys do to get a girl's attention is always interesting, and sometimes even funny. This is well written. It flows well. I can picture what is happening in this story. Very well done. Keep writing.


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
    Thanks for your review.
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