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Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 3


Eric and the Egyptians

  26 total reviews 
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rwilliam
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This is the FINAL CHAPTER!
I've only read the chapter title so far...but it is bittersweet that thesis the last chapter. I enjoy reading your work so much!

Herbie flew up to the coffin and looked in. "It's okay, Eric, you can't see the King's body. It's wrapped up in bandages, just like these mummies, and it has a mask over its face." -I love that you reassure the readers that it's ok to look at the Kings body. Well done!!

"What's it doing?" he whispered, blinking rapidly in order to ease the strain on his eyes. He didn't want to close them in case he missed something.~ LOVED this as well!!

Well, the ending implies more stories to come, I hope. Your grandson is going to be over the moon with this story. What a gift. Well done, my friend. Congratulations on the awards! Well earned.



 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Thank you so very much for all those stars, Rebekka, and your fabulous review. I like how you have pointed out the parts you really like, that really gave me a buzz. Yes, the next story starts tomorrow. The fun begins again. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by rwilliam on 15-Feb-2020
    OH YAY! I was hoping to rad another one of your wonderful writings. WOOT WOOT!!
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Rating of Chapter 12 -
This is the FINAL CHAPTER!
Hello Sandra, a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing another and the final chapter of your wonderful children's story. I can't wait for Eric to have his next adventure. Good job and have a good day!


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
    Thank you for this lovely review, my friend. And I hope you are having a lovely day, too. :)) Eric will be back this Sunday with another adventure. I hope you will join us on the journey? Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Rating of Chapter 12 -
This is the FINAL CHAPTER!
Ahh, Sandra, such fun for Eric. I'm guessing your grandson really enjoyed this adventure. :-)

Fun, satisfying ending to this story. I'll bet Eric can't wait for the next one!

One correction:

For the next hour or so, Eric, Herbie and Zig had so much fun floating around in the gravity free room. But all to (too) soon it was time to go home.


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
    Thank you so very much, Sue, for your wonderful review. I've sorted that error, thank you dear one! Big hugs. Sandra xxxxx
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What a great story and I do hope Eric goes on to more adventures.

I picked up just two small points:
But all to soon it was time to go home - should be 'all too soon'

And surely he'd want to know - there is an extra space between the first two words.

Cheers
Judy


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
    Thank you, Judy, for this lovely review. I'll make the corrections immediately! Thank you again for all your support, my friend. I've really appreciated all your help and comments. I've just started a new adventure. My husband's fault, he came up with an idea I just had to go for!! Lol. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by JudyE on 12-Feb-2020
    Good luck with your new adventure. :) It was a pleasure reading of Eric's escapades.

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
    Thank you! xx
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The Burial Chamber
I'm dashing off to read the final chapter!

Just a few points but ignore them if I've got them wrong.

"That sounds like a plan to me," Eric said with more than a little relief. - should there be a comma after 'said'? I'm not sure so really just drawing your attention to it.

The next second the bubble was spinning like a tornado forcing the boys to cling to each other while Herbie's landing gear had taken a tight hold of the handlebars. - commas after 'second', 'tornado' and 'while'

"You could do with some mouthwash, Mate!" - lower case for 'mate'?

"What do I do?" He shouted, staring at the magic gold ring on his right hand index finger. - lower case for 'he'

Noah turned to face the mummy, and in the ancient Egyptian language he slowly told them the reason they were here. - comma after 'and' and 'language'

Cheers
Judy




 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
    Thank you, big time, Judy! I've made all the corrections, now to do the same on my MS Copy. That was so lovely of you. I'll be going through it now with a fine tooth comb to see if I've missed any in the whole book. Thank you again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Rating of Chapter 12 -
This is the FINAL CHAPTER!
What a captivating story. I jumped in at the last minute. Now I have to go back and read it all from start to finish. Just got back from losing a brother in November and the funeral, welcoming family who came from overseas, that was hectic and not at all expected to lose him in such a hurry. The only consolation is he met his creator within 2 hours of falling ill.
Look forward to your next story
All the very best Sandra
Sylvia


 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
    Oh Sylvia, I am so very sorry. That was so sudden, what a shock for you and your family, but I'm glad he didn't suffer. I'm sure he'll be up there, looking down and watching over you. I am so sorry, my friend.

    Thank you so much for the six stars, Sylvia, and your lovely comments. I really appreciate them. My next one will be starting on Sunday! lol. Biggest hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
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-Great artwork!
-A grand finale to the book, Sandra.
-I loved it, and it was a little emotional at the end
because it was so unexpected but wonderful.
-I liked the "glowing ankh." That was
a good touch to this adventure.
-Now I understand the part in the
middle when Herbie gets upset at Noah
about the ring. You are quite clever!
-It was great to see Drozig and Zig, although
we were always seeing him, and didn't know it:)
-Drozig is such an endearing character.
-I can't say enough about how you
pulled it all off; Eric is going to love this story.
-You really know your aliens and how they
solve things with all kinds of gadgets; maybe
you should apply for the space program, ha, ha!
-The ending section of the story is excellent
as Eric and Herbie learn of everything that had been planned.
-Of course, goodbyes are never easy!
-Well done, my friend!


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 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
    Aww, Pam, thank you, what a really lovely review! Me on the space program? Now there's a thought! lol. I would love to have lived in a time when space travel was the norm, and it would be like hopping on a bus. Hmm. I'd have loved that. Thank you so much for the lovely 6 stars and this wonderful review, my friend. :)) Big hugs, Sandra xxxx

    Now, my dear, wonderful friend, I have some news for you!
    Graham was sitting at the breakfast table this morning and said, 'Eric and the Aqua-beings' DaDah! I'll PM you. Not sure of the right title yet but that will give you an idea. :)) xxx

reply by Pam (respa) on 11-Feb-2020
    You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. I didn't think I was too far off; you know those aliens too well, ha, ha. I read your message and gave my guesses. And here I thought I was going to read some poetry! Good luck with whatever you decide.

reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
    There will be some poetry, too. :)) I've enjoyed writing the last ones. xx

reply by Pam (respa) on 11-Feb-2020
    That sounds like a good plan!
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This is the FINAL CHAPTER!
Hello Sandramitchell,
Nice piece of General Fiction having impressive phraseology, smooth, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and depicting its theme in a fantastic way.
Interesting, and worth enjoying!


 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
    Thank you so much for reading this part, my friend. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Watch out for the next adventure! :)) Sandra xxx
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Rating of Chapter 12 -
This is the FINAL CHAPTER!
Sandra,

Well, I was not at all ready for this one to end!! I've really been enjoying it- even more than the others! I want one of the first signed copies!!

Are you on my side of the Atlantic??

Thanks so much for all the fun!


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
    Thank you so very much for the wonderful six stars, Robyn, and for the really nice comments. No, I'm in the UK. I'll send you a copy when it's published, :)) You are so sweet. I have to tell you, I wasn't going to write anymore Eric stories for a while, but my dear husband has just given me an idea and I can't wait to write it now. We will be going to Atlantica next. But this will obviously be the true story!!! LOL. Thank you so much for all the encouragement, my friend. You've been great. :)) Sandra xxx
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The last chapter is very sweet and now that I know a bit more of the story I am quite sure your grandson will love it. After all, he is the main character. You write very well. I did not notice any errors or nits. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Drew xx


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
    Thank you so much for all those lovely stars, Drew, and the wonderful review. I think the next adventure will be coming up sooner than even I thought! The support I've received from you and the other reviewers has been amazing, and you've all spurred me on to write another one. Thank you! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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