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Diana L Crawford
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Rating of Chapter 2 -
Truth & Faith
Sorry to only be beginning this story, but from what I've read so far, I believe you will take me on wild and unimaginable adventures. Your writing is superb, so descriptive and flows so nicely. I look forward to reading more! xoxo


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Many thanks for checking this one out. GMG

reply by Diana L Crawford on 01-Feb-2020
    So welcome! Going to read more this weekend!
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Rating of Chapter 6 -
The Sound of Sirens
Heh. Nautical. Drew me in. I can't resist. Interesting characters, and I'm even coming into the middle of the story.

I saw one typo, I think......

"dripping-honied"

Did you mean "dripping-honeyed"?


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Hi there, honied is correctly spelled. lol Many thanks for readiing and reviewing. G

reply by Aiona on 05-Jan-2020
    Ah, yes, you're right... "honied" is an alternative spelling. I learned something new! Thank you!
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The Sound of Sirens
While young Sinbad's been taken and thrown onto rocks before being sung to sleep, Jeffa and the Captain seem to have their hands full getting one siren captor to talk. I think, at this stage, young Sinbad seems to have the best of this deal with his beauty. I guess that remains to be seen. Good chapter G
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    All may not be as it seems. things will hot up again action-wise soon. G
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Rating of Chapter 6 -
The Sound of Sirens
So young Sindbad is going to be beguiled and tempted by a beatuiful young siren. But what do they want with him? They certainly went to great lengths to get him.

You had me cringing with your description of the torture. Of course, Sinbad and Jaffa need the information if they are going the boy from the sirens that have kidnapped him.

I look forward to the next chapter.


 Comment Written 01-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Many thanks for the great response once again. Things aren't always as they seem in this story. lol It's fun to write. G
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Calm Waters No More
This is an excellent action sequence. Our heroes are all in trouble and at risk of being lost. It will be interesting to see what Sinbad is able to do with the siren they have captured, or almost at least. Will it help them get young Sindbad back? I know; wait and see.


 Comment Written 01-Jan-2020



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Many thanks for the great review again. G
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The Sound of Sirens
Hi Gareth, this a great continuation the story. It has great imagery and simile and metaphors as well. Will they be able to save young Sinbad, I wonder. I hope so. Great writing. Ulla:))


 Comment Written 31-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Cheers, Ulla. Congrats on the numero uno spot. G

reply by Ulla on 04-Jan-2020
    Thank you so very much!!!
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The Sound of Sirens
Man, that's quite the interrogation, water-torturing a siren and then threatening to cut her tongue. Hmm. It's good she can speak English. But I kept thinking what a waste of fresh water while on the ocean.
Seems like Sindbad got the better end of the deal so far...


 Comment Written 31-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    It's rainwater. it rains a lot. lol Many thanks G
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Calm Waters No More
This is a well-written, action-packed chapter. I'm not sure I could describe such a scene so well. Your command of language is impressive.

I noticed some places where I thought there were minor errors -- punctuation mostly. I hope this is useful (and correct).
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and one thought raced through his mind; I chose poorly.
I think that semicolon should be a colon, as in an announcement.

when Jeffa plummeted in the cold waters.
I think it should be plummeted "into" the cold waters.

he kicked for the surface but moments later, he felt a tug on his ankle,
Capitalization & comma placement:
He kicked for the surface, but moment later felt a tug on his ankle,

He had to be careful, they needed the thing alive.
Suggest semicolon.

He saw nothing save the ship, and a dripping wet Jeffa climbing from the waters.
I thought you meant he saw nothing except the ship, in which case you need a comma after "nothing" -- no comma after "ship"
Suggest: He saw nothing, save the ship and a dripping wet Jeffa climbing from the waters.







 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Many thanks. I'll take another look. Cheers GMG

reply by shaffer40 on 04-Jan-2020
    Happy new year.
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Seems the siren is in more trouble than the boy. The boy will survive, of course, but will the siren? I take it they don't like fresh water, and these two seem to enjoy torturing her. But now that she's talked, do they have any reason to keep her alive?


 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    Sea water creatures and fresh water ones have a hard time with the other environment! lol Many thanks. G
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Rating of Chapter 6 -
The Sound of Sirens
This is another awesome chapter to your equally awesome book. You kept me on the edge of my chair from beginning to end and I anxiously await for the next installment. I am enjoying this immensely and thank you for sharing your wonderful imagination with all of us. I didn't find any errors but, of course, I am blind and can't even edit my own work.


 Comment Written 30-Dec-2019



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
    lol, many thanks. G

reply by Sasha on 04-Jan-2020
    You are welcome.
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