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Rooted in Dixie


My early life and Southern roots

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barbara.wilkey
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Rooted in Dixie Prologue
I can't wait to read this story. I know it's going to be good. I am already anticipating reading it. You are a few years older than me, but I can relate from the stories my mom tells, and then the ones I remember myself. Oh boy a new story coming.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    I'm glad you're planning to read these. I have some old ones from 2009= 2013 that I may revive like I did Mortgage Money and I'll put new ones it too. Thanks for review the prologue.
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barbara.wilkey
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Mortgage Money
I am so sorry I had not read this post before. Thank you for re-posting it. I enjoyed reading and it's an excellent story of hope and happy endings. I know God had His hand in helping these people. You did a great job of telling the story. The emotion came through.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    Thank you for reviewing this one. I thought it was a pretty good story but it didn't get enough reviews back in 2009. It was the first time I'd revived one. None of the people who reviewed it then are still around.
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Mary Kay Bonfante
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Rooted in Dixie Prologue
I'm very excited that you're writing another book! I always enjoy hearing both the biographical stories about your family, and the autobiographical accounts of your own life. Because it's synchronous with the times of my parents' lives (and a little earlier, like the following chapter, which you've just revived), I love to experience the feeling of those various eras; yet, it's something totally new and unexpected, because of the Southern flavor of everything. I was raised in the Northeast, and my grandparents and some of their parents were European immigrants (except that one grandfather was born here).

Just two small revisions are my suggestions for this chapter:

I was born on the outskirts of small town in Mississippi.
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I was born on the outskirts of a small town in Mississippi.

They had just lived through the great depression years,
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They had just lived through the Great Depression,

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Since you'll be gathering stories from your childhood into this book, I'm wondering if you'll be incorporating some of the material I've previously read -- not that I would mind reading it again! I took the liberty of browsing through your portfolio, and saw that the amazing story of the hurricane you survived is already incorporated into an 11-chapter book about your childhood, only some of which I've read. I also noticed a separate story about a cousin who accidentally shot himself in early adulthood or late adolescence -- a very tragic end, and a very sobering lesson on gun safety. Will you be bringing all those stories into one book? Or am I asking these questions prematurely?
Now I'm remembering the story I read most recently, about the awful neighbor boy who tried to jump you, in the woods. No, I don't think I've exhausted the vast quantity of material you've written about your youth! Please pardon my inquisitiveness, but you have a fascinating history, and I am curious about what you are going to do with all these stories. You're also a great narrator, and you have a great manner of engaging the reader in your stories. I enjoy reading them very much.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    I am so pleased that you are going to joining me on this trip down memory lane. I was going to put all these stories of my younger years into one book which I had named and moved some stories into it. Then I tried to rename it Rooted in Dixie but I couldn't find any way to do that so I just started another book. The other title I'll use only for stories where I'm writing it as if I am a child and maybe a include some childrens stories, I've written. So I will be moving stories around. In this I may include some stories of my grandparents or great grandparents. Some of the older, I'll probably revive. The one I wrote about my cousin who shot himself was written since January and so it isn't eligible for revision. Thank you so much for your wonderful help.
    Beth

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 12-Dec-2020
    It sounds wonderful, Beth. As for my help, you're very welcome, as always.
    Concerning the story of the cousin who shot himself, the one-year anniversary of the story will eventually come around, at which point you could revive it, if you want to; it's very powerful. There is no greater argument against irresponsible gun ownership, than a story like that. Blessings, my friend.
    - Mary Kay xoxo

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    I thought the story had to be two years old to be eligible for revision. I'll check again. I guess you read it. I like knowing people read my stories.
    Beth

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 13-Dec-2020
    Yes, I certainly did :-)
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Mary Kay Bonfante
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Mortgage Money
Oh Beth, this is marvelous! I see that you've revived this post, but it appears that you also intend to build upon it and that a new book is in the works -- how wonderful! I'm out of Sixties, but excited that I'll still have more of your work to read, even after the story of raising your children is complete.

So here are the errors I found in this chapter:

...the boards had dried and shrunk,leaving cracks...
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...the boards had dried and shrunk, leaving cracks...

She heard the sputter of Glover's old `35 Ford as he turned into driveway.
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She heard the sputter of Glover's old `35 Ford as he turned into the driveway.

Eugene can't really afford College for me, she reasoned.
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Eugene can't really afford college for me, she reasoned.

She was disappointed when the Glover wasn't transferred after all.
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She was disappointed when Glover wasn't transferred after all.

By canning fruits and vegetables, raising chickens and milking the one cow, Lucille's parents had given them, ...
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By canning fruits and vegetables, raising chickens and milking the one cow Lucille's parents had given them, ...

She picked up one and a fine white power fell from the bill.
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She picked up one and a fine white powder fell from the bill.

"Thank God" she cried, rushing inside to show Glover.
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"Thank God!" she cried, rushing inside to show Glover.

I see that you've already written the Prologue, and I look forward to reading that next. It will be so wonderful to learn more about your parents and your Southern background.


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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    Mary Kay, you are a jewel. I've probably told you that before. I'm so pleased you are reading my stories. You know how helpful you are. I miss so much when trying to edit my own work. I so glad you liked this story.
    Beth

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 12-Dec-2020
    You're very welcome, Beth. I loved reading it :-)
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Rooted in Dixie Prologue
I'm glad that you are starting a new book about your early life. I would like to read about them. I have recently finished my second book, a book of short story collection of three generations of my family on my mother's side.

Please write and post more. I was almost a only child and only have two half siblings who are much younger. We were not close at all. So writing is my closest friend.


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    Thank you so much Lisa. I'm pleased you want to read these stories. I'm enjoying your stories too. I wondered if you have lived in China since you write so graphically about what happened in that sad period of history. I want to read more of that book.
    Beth

reply by Lisa Wharton on 12-Dec-2020
    Yes. I grew up in China and went to college there. I graduated from Peking University in physics and came here for graduate school. I did a lot of things after coming here. I did get a Masters in electric engineering and started working as an engineer for almost 24 years. Did research before that. I always wanted to be a writer. I finally can almost do it full time. I?m retiring soon.
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Mortgage Money
Oh my! What a story! All the while, I'm thinking, why didn't they just keep their money in the bank? Was the bank that untrustworthy? Whew! It's good it was just mildew!


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. During the Great Depression most of the banks went under. Millionaires committed suicide because they lost everything. Most people those days didn't trust banks.

reply by lyenochka on 11-Dec-2020
    Oh, I see! Makes sense. Then I would have worried about hanging those bills out on the laundry line. Lol! Oh dear - what a thing. Great suspense relayed in your story. I could recognize your parents.
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Two young people madly in love trying to make it in the world. What a magnificent story. The way you told it, was perfect. I felt like I was there with them watching it all unfold. When they found the bills my heart sunk. It broke even more when everything they tried to do didn't work. I'm so glad it all worked out in the end. It's very well-written, interesting start to finish. I wish I had to six to give, It definitely deserves it, but I'm afraid I'm all out.


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and the really nice comments. I'm glad I decided to revive this story. It is the first time I did that and think it has gotten more comments than it did before.
    Beth
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This story had me on the edge of my seat! Having lived a similar life during my early marriage (but not nearly as desperate) I could picture the wood stove and feel the drafts. I wanted to cry for them. What a relief that it had a happy ending. Excellent


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. I really appreciate you reading this. I so glad ;you liked it.
    Beth
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Mortgage Money
What a delightful end to what seemed like a hopeless situation, plenty of people hid their money in strategic places back in those, enough banks had gone out of business for the confidence that it was a risk to put one's money in any place but the bank. Beautifully written dear Beth. Well done my friend, an excellent entry in this contest, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the review and great comments. It is really not in a contest. I wrote it when I was on FanStory five or six years ago. It was in a contest then. I just revived to put it in my Southern Root folder.
    Beth

reply by royowen on 11-Dec-2020
    I still enjoyed it Beth, it was a winner for me,
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Rating of Chapter 1 -
Mortgage Money
I am so glad you revived this. It's contest material for sure. So interesting about the mold on the money. Thank goodness the sun dried it.
I may return to FS for awhile. My health hasn't been good since August.



 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    I so relieved to see you name. I was afraid you might be having some health problems. I really have missed you and your writing. Thanks for the wonderful review and the all those stars.
    Beth
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