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Rating of Chapter 18 - Genius in Love: Scene Finale
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The htlm in Howard Plumb is distracting and easy to edit. (Not a knock against the script. Just a pet peeve of mine.)
Now, on to this well penned script.
An enjoyable way to end this script. No doubt you worked hard to create this. Even the stage directions show that.
Could easily see this performed on a live stage somewhere. Believe it would go over well. Even has a cheered "hero" at the piano who demonstrates although he is autistic he can still produce something of high quality.
Maybe "you let the piano say everything that needed saying" should be needs saying?
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2021 |
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
Brett, I work so galdern hard to strip my posts of any stray htlm, and if I relax in that effort it's more likely to be found in the "Author Notes". No more! There were three whole lines of HTML for one freakin' apostrophe. (Makes me wonder why FS is the only online editor I have encountered that has that problem.) Anyway, thanks. It is corrected.
Meanwhile I appreciate you so much. You don't know it, but yours is the review that pushed me (or tugged me) into ATB for this scene. This was the last day, and I was afraid I wouldn't make it.
And you did it with such pinache, my friend. Thanks for the six stars. You make me proud, and while it may very well go before the fall, it sure makes me fell good when it visits.
Be blessed!
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reply by Brett Matthew West on 06-Oct-2021
You so definately deserve ATB for this script. Congrats on that! The sixer on this script was a no brainer. What else should it have gotten? So well crafted.
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
I am nourished by kindness such as yours, dear friend.
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Rating of Chapter 18 - Genius in Love: Scene Finale
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Hi Jay,
Amazing! I can't stress enough how well you concluded this touchingly brilliant story of an autistic boy, Cornelius Plumb in 1952. Jay, you handled the death (letting Jennie think he died in his sleep while cleaning out their old house in New Mexico) of Mr. Gary Jax will kid gloves and stayed true to the way families dealt with suicide at the time. Cornie and Jennie are adorable tender twelve year olds forging their way through life that has great obstacles in their way, (death, suicide, bullying, autism, stigmas) but come though in such a tearfully lovely ending.
I will always remember these seven characters for the rest of my life. Cornie and his mind's Cililla Queez with her mini shirts and rainbow hair coaching Cornie to take on the terrifying aspects of autism with love and grace. His musical genius keeps him grounded in his "ocean" of peace"... after the demise of Piddly Poo. Toloachi, his mother who loves and understands Cornie from birth and desires the best for him with all her heart. She also knows her husband, Mr. Howard Plumb who dismissed his "damaged son" for most of Cornie's twelve years but does love him and is overtaken with affection toward Cornie as Cornie emerged triumphant at the graduation ceremony with Jennie by his side....and sweet caring Jennie who is the light in the dark for Cornie to look to that drew him out of his alienation.
Sweet Jennie who has lost her brother and now her father, Gary Jax. Mr. Jax failed his family in his weakness and left Phyllis to deal with life on her own. Dear Phyllis who tries to always see the best in people. She and Jennie will be all right. Then there is admirable Mr.Jeff Hallows, principal of Zachary Taylor Middle School. He always saw the good in Cornelius not just his musical genius but into the potential inside this autistic lad to make it in the real world and he nurtured that kernel at a time that shunned mental and emotional disabilities and basically shut them away from the public eye.
Loved the ending, Jay! It is the ending? -sorry if I assumed too quickly. It felt like is was the beautiful conclusion. So satisfying and good. Settled in my mind to keep this touching story tucked inside my heart.
Always,
Senyai
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2021 |
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
Lovely words, Senyai. So poignantly felt, I know. You've locked in every character, even Piddly-Poo, and brought out their essence in your understanding. Yes, the play's over. I am breathing quietly again. As an aside, I could almost picture the boy playing the boogie-woogie piano as being Cornelius, that is, until he kept grinning at the camera. That boy wouldn't have trouble getting dates, would he?
Again, thank you so much for being with this play from the beginning, Senyai. Oddly, I don't think this last scene will accrue the 26 reviewers it needs to crack into ATB. If it does, then October's could well end the play with 9 consecutive months of "Number One For the Month". Sorry if it sounds like I'm boasting, but I would be proud of that honor.
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reply by Senyai on 05-Oct-2021
I hear you, Jay! It would be an honor indeed. ATB is definitely owed to this endearing story. I don?t know who is on The Committee but they would be daft not to award this story Number One for the Month, in my humble opinion :))
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
But it can only be conferred to ATB stories, not Recognized (under 25 reviews). It's really no biggie. The combatant in me just doesn't want to lose the streak.
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reply by Senyai on 07-Oct-2021
Jay, you are Number 1 ATB for October right now! Not sure how this ranking system works? do you keep that number but for how long and what determines that number changing as the month progresses?
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
Thank you for keeping an eye on it. It's too early to order the champagne, but if it remains number 1 at month end it will mean Genius in Love has made number 1 every month since its beginning.
I'm no fool, though. There was little, if any competition. There are only a handful of script/playwrights on FanStory. Most don't promote them enough to reach the necessary 26 review portal. An example would be Lancelot's (Lance's) finale of his superb script, "The Nation". It should be the script of the month (and I told him so), but he only promoted it to the $0.80 level, while mine was at $1.22. Take a look at "The Nation" and you'll see what I meant in my review to him.
Lance is brilliant, and very socially oriented.
If Lance is the true Patriarch of the Script/Playwright family, Judi (Judiverse) is Matriarch, and she, too, is brilliant. You've probably read her stuff. I've learned so much from each of them, Senyai.
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reply by Senyai on 07-Oct-2021
Jay, good to know?
I will look into these great writers as well.
Have a great day :))
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