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The Challenge
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Young Man Has Doubts About Becoming a Priest
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Rating of Chapter 1 - The Challenge, Act 1, Scene 5
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No, I'd not heard 'uncle' said that way before, in fact I went through the beginning of the chapter again to see if I'd missed something and he wasn't Phillip's cousin. Thanks for the explanation. :)
So far, Phillip hasn't acknowledged he is gay, probably because his future would be in jeopardy if he did, and it would mean admitting it to himself. But if his brother can see it, many others will, too. Time for Phillip to step back and reflect upon what he really wants in life. Another well written chapter, Jay, and I think I've caught up!
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2021 |
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
Good, Sandra. You got out of it exactly what I hoped you would. Some came out of it wondering if James was gay, oddly because of what Phillip said to him after James's comment to his mother about naming the first one after her. With that I was only trying to show James's drunken state. Again, Sandra, thanks for weighing in. I've missed you. The 6 stars was the whipped cream!
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Rating of Chapter 1 - The Challenge, Act 1, Scene 5
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Hi Jay,
I wonder why James drinks so much? If he loses the election for Worcester city council, I could see him getting drunk... perhaps. But that vote is still in the future. He wants to be a politician, but perhaps he feels a bit intimidated by his brother. Is he jealous? The other thing I wonder about, does he suspect that Phillip is gay? And will he let it out of the bag to mother Margaret... by accident, of course, in a drunken stupor?
"But when I come out all sober and smellin' pretty ... you're still ... gonna be ... whooo you aaare."
Margaret noticed that Arthur looked sad when he left. Is that it, though? Or will she log that in her brain, and later wonder "Why?"
Hopefully, James will sober up before Professor Fitzimonds arrives. (I wonder what this visit is all about? Does the professor suspect Phillip's homosexual tendencies, by any chance?)
I notice you spelled his name "Fitzimonds". Perhaps that spelling is legitimate. But I would guess "Fitzsimons" or "Fitzsimmons". (Fitzsimons is a surname of Norman origin, common in both Ireland and England.) ...just wondering~
A good scene, Jay, and necessary to the play. James and Phillip seem to get along, roughhousing like a couple of puppies. I just hope James doesn't blow it. The next scene should be interesting with the Professor.
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2021 |
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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
Thank you Kimbob for taking the time to read this. I realize the timing was poor on my part to ask you to read it. One of the reasons I am waiting until after the first of the year to write the next scene is that I have no idea whatever the content of the meeting with the Professor will be ... or yield. I did at one time. But I can't follow that direction because the earlier scenes disarmed the coming one. Now it would be so "staged" if I followed the original design. I shall wait for inspiration's call.
There is no significance to the spelling, or misspelling of the Professor's name.
Again ... thank you for this ... and for the six!
Merry Christmas,
Jay
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reply by Father Flaps on 12-Dec-2021
I would have read it by Saturday night anyway, Jay. I had 2 sixers left, and one was destined for you.
Merry Christmas, buddy!
Kimbob
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Rating of Chapter 1 - The Challenge, Act 1, Scene 5
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| We have a pretty good handle on all characters' motivations by now, I think. You will, of course, prove me wrong in the next scene or act. These brothers are a compelling pair who are trying to figure out their relationship with each other.
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2021 |
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
No, I don't think I'll prove anyone wrong here. As a matter of fact, My thoughts on the final couple of scenes are so plebian that I'm taking a hiatus from the play while I work on a Christmas story, and not attack scene six until after the new year. As usual, though, I thank you for reading this and for rewarding me so heartily.
I hope the Covid is behind you both and that you'll have a marvelous and healthy Christmas and New Year.
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