Oh I love this, its fast, pacy, brave and strong.You can really still feel your trademarks on this free verse piece as well, I love it when your tough side comes out. ;-)
"I won't be pleasing
to a palate
accustomed to the
gourmet texture of victory,
not when my held breath
plumps this heart to proportions
too large to swallow."
-This is the part I really love, I can't get enough of this attitude its fantastic.
This is really an intelligent piece of free verse, where you have applied your skill with word usage and descriptives beautifully outside the confines of structure. Really enjoyed this my friend, one of your best free verse pieces so far....
Thought I would have a glance at these ones now, just chop back and forth at my leisure you know ;).
I really enjoyed this little foray into free verse my friend. I know you're not comfortable in this area, but it's becoming clear that the more you try, the better you become at it.
Even though you've (reluctantly I bet lol) refused structure, you have still used your incredible style for originality in your composition. I loved the imagery behind the words, I can see exactly what you want me to see, which I'm sure is the point. Very nice indeed my friend....
Ah... true poetry :) Nice job. I love those lines... in a storm of dreams, no longer dreams... great job pulling things back and forth there. Really made me stop and think about it. I've missed a lot of poems from you lately it seems. I might have to start checking in here more. Hope you are well, sweetie. I do miss you and your poetry, but life has been a little crazy lately here, and I'm sure yours is no different. Hopefully I'll catch up with you soon. Much love.
As I read through this "free verse," a smile spreads slowly across my lips
until laughter erupts from my insides. Apparently you were the "object of
desire" and were the unwilling participant. Do you not care for "in-charge"
females who come on strong, who know what they want and go after it?
Are you one of those men who must sound the victory cry at all cost?
Sometimes I have to visualize what is taking place. Once in a while I hit
it right on the button. Other times I fail. Excellent word usage above and
beyond my thinking capacity.
Well, I can say this, it is different. Days disappear so rapidly that it is difficult to remember the name of each day. And the fun part is, they go
by faster with every birthday. Have no regrets. Life is too short for regrets.
Don't count on that timekeeper rewinding your soul. It ain't gonna happen.
This is it, old buddy. This is the only shot that you will get. Make it happen.