I really enjoyed this poem. The mental imagery is apt and reminds me of Rodin's 'The Thinker' which I've seen a few times. It was fun of you to bring a human story to this and not solely focus on th sculpture. Well done.
This is cool. The imagery you painted was wonderful as I observed within the scenery of artwork and creation. A snicker did rise to the lips as the adventure unfolded and as such has made my day. Thank you for sharing your amazing talent with the world.
Wow, your poems really flow together in perfect rhythm. It's very captivating and held my attention the whole time. Another thing I notice about all your poems is that they all end very well. Keep it up.
It's a really sweet poem, and I have no corrections. I especially like the last stanza, which comes to a very fulfilling close. Keep up the good work. I'll be sure to check out some of your other poems.
I love the unexpected twist and the moralization on it.
Just a picky note here: "unloosing" is not a word. The word is "loose," and its variants: loosen, loosening and perhaps even "loosing." It's like "that." You can't "unthaw" something -- that would have to be "to freeze" it.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2007
Thank you. This is so old I forgot about it. Maybe I'll use unleashing.