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Finding Peace


A Poem for the contest.

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A very well-written poem about faith in God. There are many things in life that sometimes make us doubt His excistence but when we look back we can see where He was to comfort or carry you through those heart breaking times.


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you Sandra for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
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It is nice you are able to walk up stairs to the church to be with God, to pray for others and leave all your troubles with God up above. But it is also nice when you decide to walk down the stairs, to live your life in where the karma is good.

Well done.

I corrected my Limerick in my metre class and will post it again soon.


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you Lisa for your review, I really appreciate your words and look forward to reading your Limerick too, love Dolly x
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Hello Dolly.

The abab rhyme scheme in each stanza is well done. I felt like the first two stanzas were a statement of faith and the third was a falling away. The fourth describes a redemption and return to faith.

Robert



 Comment Written 17-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you Robert for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 18-Oct-2020
    You're welcome
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Beautifully said, Dolly! And yes, God totally understands and He is BIG enough to take our honest feelings and doubts. But He remains with us to walk those grief-bound paths. Best wishes in the contest!


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you Helen for your review and your gift for this poem. I loved your words here and your understanding, love Dolly x
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Oh, a picture of that Los Olivos Church that you mentioned in your article about Adeje. I'm glad you included that. You write of someone whose faith has dried up but who has had a change of heart and whose faith has returned. God understood, and the narrator is again able to take any troubles to the God up above. Beautifully written, and great job with the meter. judi


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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you Judi for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, yes this is the church I mentioned, your words are appreciated, love Dolly x

reply by judiverse on 18-Oct-2020
    You're welcome. Have a great Sunday. judi
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This spiritual poem, Finding Peace, reveals the struggle with one's faith when the bottom drops out and God seems to be more observer than controller.


 Comment Written 17-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you Bill for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x
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Beautiful poem as always Dolly I really enjoy your poems. Really nice faith entry for the contest. I Love this part, time taught me that there's a life to be lived,
a world that's untapped, where the karma is good;
with faith I returned and began to forgive,
I'm not on my own, for our God understood.very nicely done. Great photo as well.



 Comment Written 17-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you Joanne for your review, glad you enjoyed this one an the photograph too, love Dolly x
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I think the title of your sincere poem sums up what most people hope to find through a faith experience: Peace. Some have an expectation that a faith belief through religion will provide it, others such as yourself (and me) get to an understanding of the untapped world of living, where connection and forgiveness can be felt under an umbrella of loving karma.

(That church tower wall is nicely contemporary.)


 Comment Written 17-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
    Thank you Lisa for your review, you understood my words perfectly here, yes that church is very modern and the town is a mix of old and new, love Dolly x
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Dolly'sPoems your poem for the contest.
Finding Peace has excellent meter. This is the first it I have seen this type of meter here; I am wondering what it is?
Gert



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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
    Thank you Gert for your review, it is Amphibrach meter, love Dolly x

reply by Gert sherwood on 17-Oct-2020
    You are so welcome Dolly's Poems, Amphibrach meter, will look and see how to write a poem using this format
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Your poem is about God and wanting to believe in Him. I could not live without Him. I have a close relative who has terminal cancer. If I did not have God to turn to, it would be very difficult. When we enter the eternal gates, there is forever joy. Everybody is happy and there's no pain.


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
    Thank you Rosemary for your review and your six stars, I really appreciate your words here, love Dolly x
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