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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Chapter 7 - Before Homecoming"

Murder in a small town.

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Hmm, so Marcy could have told the truth about the custodian but for some reason didn't. She could have just said she had no interest in Jeff but didn't. Could have said she did want to go to the party but didn't.

At some point the reader will lose any sympathy for her.


Well done.


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you. I'm trying to balance Marcy's academic intelligence with the impulsive decions teenagers make.
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Marcy is definitely harboring some bad news from the past. Also, it's very evident by the conversation taking place that these young people have a preconceived notion about the custodian. Their ill-placed judgment reveals a lack of integrity. I suppose that can be expected at this premature age.

Ralf


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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Exactly. Thanks for reading.
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Okay, this chapter turned up a new leaf in the story that can incriminated Andrew for good. Here comes the doubt, was he a pervert or not? I know that sometimes people with delay are very sexual active, but is this the case? But again changing a person through the eyes of a teenager who has a natural talent for exaggeration.


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
    We shall see. ;) Thanks for reading.
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