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Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Chapter 10 - Before Homecoming"

Murder in a small town.

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Raffaelina Lowcock
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Giving more information than is asked for is never a good idea. This was a huge mistake telling Lily she kind of liked her after revealing that she was gay. So, no surprise again here that Lily wants to go home. Marcy will be worried now about Lily spreading the word.

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 Comment Written 05-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2020
    Teenagers ... not always thinking things through. Thanks for reading.

reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 05-Nov-2020
    It's a good story, I'm enjoying.
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Aha, Marcy secret it's up, now we need to find more about Lily and figure it out, what really happened. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
    We're getting closer. Thanks for reading.
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Devastating. I read the prior chapter earlier--I'd hoped Lily would be accepting of Marcy--the dialog is spot-on for the situation. Fine work. Cheers. LIZ


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2020


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    Thank you. I had to think a long time about how to portray that situation.
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