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Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Tie-Breaker"

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AJ McCall

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Haha! This has to be my favorite sparring chapter so far. Vassa is one dirty fighter and a compliment Rhujag for only laughing and showing respect. I have a feeling the two are going to be the best of friends soon enough. That part where Vassa elbowed him was hilarious. I admire the way you write the fight scene; you focus more on how fast or skillful the character is, telling the readers they blocked or charged and then put a few detailed moves in there so that it upped the action. Rhujag has to be my favorite is this chapter.
Can't wait to read the next one! (Wish I had six stars!:)

Comment Written 24-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020

Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad it came out so well. Rhujag and Vassa playing around was a lot of fun to write. I've had some practice writing fight scenes, so I think they're coming together a lot better than they were when I first started (back in the mists of time)

reply by AJ McCall on 26-Oct-2020

Haha! Definitely back in the mists of time, lol! You're welcome! It was very fun to read!

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This is a great story you have going here. I've also noticed you made up some words for your story which is good because it helps construct the culture of your world. Just make sure you don't overdo it or else no one else can read it.

Comment Written 24-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020

Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'll try to be careful with it. Debating with a few readers if a glossary is needed and how to go about building one without giving too much away.

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