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Football - A Novel


Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Football Chapter 3 part 2"

A mother faces life's struggles.

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Rosemary Everson1
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A little politics in this school. I feel bad for Katherine as she seems so nice. That Mr. Frost is sure a mean character; he needs to be a little kinder to a new staff addition!


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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
    Thank you for the encouragement.
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Sanku
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yet another instalment of this promising story .Working in a school is as interesting as any other area.The staff room jealousies , gossips and supporting friends - no room for boredom....and very satisfying too.


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
    Oh so true. Thank you for the kind review.
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Barb,

Nope, not too long, and nicely done. I can see Frost plans to be a major thorn in Riley's side. Excellent - external conflict - check!

The only pause I had was when you mentioned Rodney, then I had to assume that was Frost's first name. If you've said it before, it's been a little bit.

Thanks!


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    I had mentioned it before. I guess I needed to do it more often. Will make that correction. Thank you for the kind review.
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seaglass
 
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Boy, Mr. Frost is a frosty character. Don't like him much but there's one of him in every setting. I think God puts them there to keep us humble. Lol a thorn in the flesh..
Story getting very lucky interesting.


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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Brett Matthew West
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-In L1 - Mom's should be moms

-Trying to get settled into a new job can be difficult, especially when there is a jerk like Frost involved

-Seems Riley is going to have her hands full with Frost

-Plenty of avenues this story could travel.

-Easy to follow the action as the teachers met for their initial day of school


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
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"I don't think you did anything except get this job. I heard a rumor his son applied and interviewed but you were hired instead." (Yep. That would make a school yard enemy.)

"I think all schools have them." (Some more than others!)

"He called it conditioning, but my legs are questioning it." (Great line for a kid!)

Enjoyed!


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Pam (respa)
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-This is a very good chapter, Barbara.
-It flowed well from beginning to end.
-Having been a high school English
teacher, I could relate to it very well.
-The camaraderie between Angie
and Katherine was evident in
their conversation. She was very
helpful explaining about Mr. Frost's son.
-I was impressed by Jordan's politeness
in speaking to Angie.
-I find it interesting that Mr. Edwards
proposed a girl's cross country team,
and also began the meeting with
the topic of sexual harassment. Mr.
Frost can certainly use that!
-One small thing: the number of gals interested.
I wonder if girls might be a better choice.
-I enjoyed the chapter, and it will be
interesting to see why Katherine has
been summoned to the office!


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the kind review. Good point about the gals. I will think about it.

reply by Pam (respa) on 31-Oct-2020
    You are very welcome, Barbara.
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Monica Chaddick
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Congratulations on your work being recognized. I thought this was a well written piece. It flows well and holds the readers' interest. Maybe a little more description of the boys in the story itself, but that would be my only suggestion.


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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roof35
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I like this story a lot so far. You are getting your characters fleshed out and some are likable and some are not. It is well written with no errors. I am looking forward to the next chapter.


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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BethShelby
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I am really enjoying this story. You need not have worried. I think you are perfect to write this kind of story. As a teacher and mother of four boys who are into sports, it sounds perfect for you. I'll bet you've even met someone like Mr. Frost.

Katherine's eyes met her knew friend's her new friend's


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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