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Ah, poor Kestrel--the ultimate fish-eater out of water. Love the dichotomy of the classic PI faced with the digital age. Clearly, you had a lot of fun playing with the stereotypes at both ends. Well done.
Peace, Lee
"Mr Kestrel?" The voice was husky, like she'd spent all day barking and chasing cars.--nice
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Comment Written 03-Nov-2020 |
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Excellent writing here, Gareth! Actually, as I read along, it reminded me of Mastery's (Bob's) PI, Cleve Hawkins. I've been reading his new novel-in-process. You have some terrific descriptions throughout, one of Bob's specialties...
"The rain pitter-pattered off the dusty windowpane of his ground floor window, sending him in its direction."
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"Outside, the city was grey and dirty, like a particularly unhygienic elephant's arse."
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"The fingernails were painted red and long enough to spear fish."
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"Her smile could have sunk the Titanic."
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"Steve turned his back on her to gather his thoughts but mainly to hide the protuberance in his trousers."
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"Jasper stuck out worse than a square at a sock-hop."
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"Vanessa had been gone by the time he returned, like a fart in the wind."
I wondered about Steve heading across the street without any discussion of a fee. Lucky for him, Jasper wasn't a karate expert.
I enjoyed this short fiction. You could easily keep it going. Turn it into a novel.
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2020 |
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