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Happier than Most!

You don't have to be rich too be happy.

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roof35

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This is a very poignant poem. Your illustrations pair perfectly. I do think you have a typo you might want to fix. "With little too no stress" should probably be "With little to no stress."

Comment Written 20-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020

Thanks Roof35. Your suggestion is note and I will change. Have a Happy Thanksgiving.

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Vanna1

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Second stanza Mr. Delaney not ( 's). And past not pass. What is this box type? Fix quotes. Who is me? Joe stil lives *his* awkward wording use at or at his. Joe was happy fix to Joe is happy. Yku using past tense but yohr last stanza is present. I have known homeless people, they were not happy. Cold, hungry, tired and dirty. Wishing they had a roof and bed. E for effort! This is a great theme.

Comment Written 20-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020

Thanks Vanna, Recommendations noted. Thanks for review, rating and comments. Have a Happy Thanksgiving Day.

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:( so sad but true. I really like the fact that you gave Joe a voice. You described things that most of us never think about-scrounging any meal, box with a fake gun. The picture you paired with this is perfect! A homeless man grateful to be receiving a gift and most importantly grateful for the freedom that he once fought for. Nice job

Comment Written 20-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020

Hello kmoss,
I pray you are well during these troubling days. Thank you for your review, rating and kind words. Please have a wonderful Thanksgiving Day.

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Brenda Elizabeth Rose

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Very well done. Your rhyming poem on a homeless man was poignant and touching. You are right that the poor should not be ignored. The picture and presentation were perfect for this piece. Thank you for sharing. Blessings. ~Brenda

Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020

Hi Brenda,
I pray you are doing well these troubling days. Yet, we have so much to be thankful for. Thanks for taking time to review my poem. I really appreciate this review, rating and kind words. I pray you and your family have a Happy Thanksgiving:-)

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Love this. Happiness is not OUR idea of what it is for any other individual...it is for the individual to decide. Of course, those who suffer mental illness may not be cognizant of their true illness...but they know what a smile is, they understand generosity, compassion, a meal...

A quick story to share: Last winter I came to notice an elderly man who "claimed" a city street corner and called out "Blessings for change!"--
I admit I passed him by the first several days...but then I noticed that he had quite a following of folks who went out of their way to drop change in his hat. I was drawn to do the same... I crossed the street and dropped my one dollar bill and all the change I had into his upturned hat... He smiles as though I'd given him hundreds. I said "God Bless you sir--use it in good health." He nodded and as I turned to leave he said "Oh, I will, Miss--this money is not for me--I donate it every day to the homeless shelter."

I was in a state of grace at his words. There he was, freezing and clearly homeless but he didn't see himself that way--he was an instrument of God--there to ease the way for others.

A message I will never forget!

Karenina

Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020

Hi Karenina,
Thank you so much for sharing that story. It's a beautiful message about not judging people, because we don't know a person's heart. I usually ask a homeless person a question about their life or life in general. I am always a better person from their answer. Please have a wonderful weekend and a nice Thanksgiving, my friend.

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It is sad to think that someone can be happier and more peaceful being homeless than in an expensive home. I guess the lack of stress makes in easier. Though I think we should do more to get these homeless vets in housing.
It should be litte to no stress
Keep writng and stay healthly.
dragonpoet

Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020

Hi dragon poet,
I pray you are doing well. Thank you kindly for my poem review, rating and your kind words. Yes, they (the homeless) say, no stress in their lives is a better way to live. Happy Thanksgiving to you.

reply by dragonpoet on 20-Nov-2020

I would think there would be stress of posstibly freezing to death in the winter and suffering from heat stroke in the summer. But the other stresses would be gone.

reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020

Yes, many homeless aren't blessed as Joe. They face many obstacles. Enjoy Thanksgiving!!

reply by dragonpoet on 20-Nov-2020

Enjoy your Thanksgiving too.
Joan

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Jannypan (Jan)

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You are right. This is a great example of 'there but for the grace of God go I.' Your story of Joe is one that many fit. Your lines read smooth with a great story which no one should judge. Others never know the circumstances of the homeless, but are quick to judge. Love the quote from the Bible!
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020

Thank Jan,
Yes, God's grace is why we are so blessed. We should never be quick to judge others, but have a little empathy for them. Thank you for your review, rating and kind words.

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crzypnter

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I think you did this subject justice, as we can never know one's circumstances that would lead them to the streets. Some stay by choice while others do not. Joe found his happiness and that's all that matters. Thanks for sharing. Blessings
August

Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020

Hello Crztpnter,
I appreciate your review, rating and kind words. Stay sage and have a wonderful Thanksgiving:-)

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We have the 3rd highest homeless rate here in FL. But you never see them. We have so many wooded areas and they stay hidden in them. I don't know how they live. My friend works with them, giving food, blankets and housing when he can. He says they have their own society and trust no one. I don't know if that is just here or common everywhere. There is way too much of it and not enough is done to help. But they can be very hard to help. My church has helped and seen people start to live normal lives again. It is very gratifying. I do hope more can be done for them. I am afraid if the country gets shut down again it will add to the numbers. I pray it doesn't happen. Well done with the poem.

Comment Written 18-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020

Hi Roxanna,
Thank you much for these comments, I know is true. Yes, it sad the richest country in the world have so many homeless cases. Please have a wonderful Thanksgiving. Kudos to your church:-)

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I love your poem, it tells a story and it is a happy one. We think of the homeless as being miserable but that is not always the case. It is unbelievable how many homeless we have in this country. Your poetic form is excellent and I enjoyed reading about a man who sees his circumstances differently.

Comment Written 18-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020

Hello Mermaids,
Awe. Thank you so much for your review, rating and kind words. I am still learning to really write my poetry. However, I love writing my thoughts, feelings and about things we don't always think about. I hope you and your family have a beautiful Thanksgiving. Take care.

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