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Beaver Moon Equals Freedom


It's nice to be your own boss

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zanya
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A short story evoking emotion portrayed with excellent use of landscape description and atmosphere - alone in the wilderness and relishing the quiet and being alone in Nature


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
    I'm sorry it's taken so long to respond, I appreciate you reading and reviewing my story.
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This is a neat story about being first in a new territory. It does need a few tweaks. First, you are asked to start with a given sentence. The most common cause of disqualification in this contest is writers who like you don't do that. You have to retain the integrity of that sentence. You have to have a period after 'sky'. It is easily sort it but do it or you won't have a chance.

My other bone of contention lies at the othet end of the story.

'It was good to be a mountain man and seeing this country before throngs of settlers came west.' Think about it how does he know that '...throngs of settlers came west.' And that is in the past tense too.

This would fix it but it is really up to you
'It was good to be a mountain man and seeing this country before throngs of settlers come west, as they have already done further south on the prairies.'

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 Comment Written 19-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
    I fixed the first sentence. My word count is 249. Your suggestion at the end would add 10 words to the count which I?m pretty sure would also be a disqualification.

reply by Pantygynt on 19-Nov-2020
    Yes to exceed the word count would result in a DQ so you would have to prune elsewhere, but as I said it is up to you how you remedy the problem.
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equestrik
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There are not too many people who can experience the lifestyle you write about here, not these days. It sure seems like a free way of being even though it would be some tough winters.

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 Comment Written 19-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
    I'm sorry it's taken so long to respond, I appreciate you reading and reviewing my story.
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