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Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "November Beaver Moon"

A collection of my poems 2020

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Hello,

I love your flash fiction.... Great entry for the Short Story Writing Prompt contest. You managed to write a complete story in a few words, that's harder than it seems.

I love the nature scene imagery ...so beautiful.

Well done!


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    thank you,
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Hi JLR.
For me you have written a very creative and engaging short story about the feeling you felt when looking at a beaver moon. I had to look up what it was, LOL.
Many thanks for sharing. Take care, Pete


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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
    Pete, thank you I am not usually a prose writer, I do more free verse poetry, so your validation is appreciated.
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Well, while I found this narrative very descriptive of the telling of a person's feelings at that time of night. And, this is not an insult. Where is the STORY? Beginning, middle, and end.


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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Lance Hum that my friend s why I stick to poetry... great input, thank you!
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This is a good story for the prompt line. Looking at a full moon for some reason does cause you to start thinking of other times when the moon was full and you were in love. I like the words you've used in this story. They almost sound like poetry.


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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Beth, thank you, do not do much prose, perhaps that is why it may seem more like a free verse poem. I like to practice writing however, it does make one think.
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This is a nicely imagined romantic piece, you create that moment when through the image of the moon, you are transported to all those romantic moments of life, past and future included. It's like a window onto the soul. Detailed descriptions of the night air and the light of the moon flesh out the scene. It's that moment in the darkness, alone with your lover, when the emotions hidden inside bubble up to the surface. estory


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    estory, thank you!
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What a lovely short story, it certainly had the beginning, middle and end. I
enjoyed reading all the detail, the imagery and journey through the moons cycle, and the wonderful love that once was. Excellent. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Sandra, thank ou very much!
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Your story is very romantic; revealing the low hung moon displaying the night's skyline. The cool night air brings about a bit of calm stillness as you think about your loved one.


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    Smiling back, thank you!
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This is a nicely presented story for the contest. Beautiful picture and well written story. Your last lines are lovely and thought provoking. Best to you in the contest.


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    Thanks for your time spent reviewing and commenting.
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Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the moments filled with romantic feelings.
Live description of scenes and situations is particularly noteworthy.
Laudable Attempt!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2020



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    My! thank you so much!

reply by RPSaxena on 25-Nov-2020
    JLR, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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You are a beautiful writer and a contemplative philosopher, it would seem.
There is a nice lyrical quality to your writing...seems like you've likely been a writer for some time.

There are several strong entries in this contest and yours is one of them. Yours is the only one I have read that mentions the Beaver moon twice (though not in those words.) I thought it was a good thing to go back and reconnect to the beginning of your story.
Your last line is a strong one...journeys without needing a passport. Well-done.


 Comment Written 20-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Cynthia, wow! I am so very grateful for your review and comments, thank you!
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