For me you have written a very creative and engaging short story about the feeling you felt when looking at a beaver moon. I had to look up what it was, LOL.
Many thanks for sharing. Take care, Pete
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
Pete, thank you I am not usually a prose writer, I do more free verse poetry, so your validation is appreciated.
This is a good story for the prompt line. Looking at a full moon for some reason does cause you to start thinking of other times when the moon was full and you were in love. I like the words you've used in this story. They almost sound like poetry.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
Beth, thank you, do not do much prose, perhaps that is why it may seem more like a free verse poem. I like to practice writing however, it does make one think.
This is a nicely imagined romantic piece, you create that moment when through the image of the moon, you are transported to all those romantic moments of life, past and future included. It's like a window onto the soul. Detailed descriptions of the night air and the light of the moon flesh out the scene. It's that moment in the darkness, alone with your lover, when the emotions hidden inside bubble up to the surface. estory
What a lovely short story, it certainly had the beginning, middle and end. I
enjoyed reading all the detail, the imagery and journey through the moons cycle, and the wonderful love that once was. Excellent. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Nice piece of Romance Fiction meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the moments filled with romantic feelings.
Live description of scenes and situations is particularly noteworthy.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
You are a beautiful writer and a contemplative philosopher, it would seem.
There is a nice lyrical quality to your writing...seems like you've likely been a writer for some time.
There are several strong entries in this contest and yours is one of them. Yours is the only one I have read that mentions the Beaver moon twice (though not in those words.) I thought it was a good thing to go back and reconnect to the beginning of your story.
Your last line is a strong one...journeys without needing a passport. Well-done.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
Cynthia, wow! I am so very grateful for your review and comments, thank you!