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Do we fight for freedom?


A way of life.

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Mrs. KT
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Hello Roy!
Your poetic verse is dynamic and powerful.
It speaks of your great faith and your lack of need for worldly goods.
I found these two stanzas especially moving:
For I own little in this life,
though rich in children, grands and wife.
And you can burn my home to ash,
but you can never steal faith's stash.

Send your army, grind men's bones,
for what I own is God's alone.
For time will judge the ferry's fare,
yes, I am rich... my cupboard's bare.

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Second stanza; last line:
and other's (others') robes are torn and frayed?

Thank you for sharing!
diane



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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much Diane, for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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This is a very poetic and rich poem you have penned. It is well written. I like how you structured this poem. Well done! Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much Raul, fo these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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I especially like the lines, "for I own little in this life, though rich in children, grands and wife." What a nice tribute to your family. You are rich, indeed. This is well written, well rhymed and well done.


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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Your poem is very well expressed to capture the quandary of what freedom means and how 'good luck' is bestowed. Your faith is your bastion of righteous living that keeps you aware of what is important.
"Either all humans are equal, or they're not" is clearly a concept that some folks struggle with, to the detriment of humanity as a whole.


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much LisaMay, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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I think you are quite correct that what earthly wishes will not by you a dime of grace in this world or the next. I think if one is fortunate or clever or brilliant enough to gather riches he is still poor if he does not know the joy of sharing what he has accrued with those less fortunate. I think God does not give a wink about ones BANK account...but the ACCOUNT of one's life...ah, that reaps blessings!--Karenina


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much Karenina, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy

reply by karenina on 23-Nov-2020
    My pleasure.--Karenina
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Hi Roy, this is yet another beautifully written poem that really gives food for thought. Yes, on a selfish note, there is no doubt in my mind that I have been lucky where I have been born and the part of the world my family have and does inhabit. Why should I begrudge that? I give to charity when I can, but I can't single handily save the world nor take on the full weight of guilt. I might as well give up living. This is a huge topic with no single answer. I loved the poem. Ulla:)))


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much Ulla, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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Hello Roy, another really well expressed poem from you. Perfect in form and the content is wonderful. 'The only freedom that I know, is free my thought so I can grow.' Well said. It is the only real freedom any of us will really know. No-one can take that away.
For I own little in this life,
though rich in children, grands and wife.
And you can burn my home to ash,
but you can never steal faith's stash.

Send your army, grind men's bones,
for what I own is God's alone.
For time will judge the ferry's fare,
yes, I am rich... my cupboard's bare......... Great stanzas!

Well written - glad I had a six left for you. Warm regards Dorothy x



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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much Dorothy, for these excellent comments and a great review, ans wonderful stars, blessings Roy
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Dear Roy, this poem really makes one stop and think, and try to answer the questions asked, as best we can. and usually find that we come up short of God's full intention.
Thank you for sharing the things that you have tried to do, and hold out to us, as an example.


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much Suzanna, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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Yes, I don't think we have anything to boast about. We had no choice where we would be born. It is had to realize we are all equal because some are born into riches and other poverty. Some have Godly parents and some have ashiest parents or ever abusive parents. I'm not sure how everyone has a chance in this world, but I know God knows what he is doing.


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much Beth, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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I agree. If we're not here to help one another and spread God's word, what are we hear for? It would seem purposeless. I think each person is where he/she is meant to be. Everything can be taken away from us, but we still have God. When do you think the torture for that will begin?


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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thanks Yvonne, for these lovely comments and super review, blessings Roy
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