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To the Sea


Life in Uncertain times

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Congrats on your prize for this contemplative and eloquent poem--powerful imagery--blend both smooth and rough/grit and faith will be enough. Cheers. LIZ



 Comment Written 07-Dec-2020



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    Hello Liz... thanks so very much. I appreciate your encouraging words. :)

    Melissa
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Ciao Sugarray!

Glad to see this beautiful poem made the poem of the month contest !

You used very descriptive words to give your poem life.

The first 2 verses speak of life's trials in a metaphoric way ..

And I love this phrase that follows :

Where was the smoothness of the clay;
the bright sunshine that blessed my way?


(My mamma sculptured and I love the texture of clay .. biggrin)

We are not alone ...God is with us , we just need to search for him in inside us:

Then, deep inside I felt His peace,
a gentle nudge, a calm release.

What a comforting certainty and great rhyme .. these two lines combine perfectly.

We are not alone in these troubled times and our ...

grit and faith will be enough to face what the world throws at us and we will succeed in reaching
the other side of the sea..

......bridge over troubled waters.... came to mind reading your closing verse.

Keep safe sugarray!





 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Thank you so very much, Franca, for your lovely words that have encouraged me in my writing!! How delighted I was to see that you felt the importance of the clay, grit, faith and the goal to reach the other side. Hugs, my friend.

    Melissa
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Just looking through. I liked this. Fully deserves its place. Beautifully imagery,and a good rhythm throughout.
Wishing you the best of luck.
My best wishes.
RGstar


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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
    Thank you so very much RG for the lovely comments. :)

    Melissa
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This is another sophisticated poem with a lot of internal reflection which I should learn. Yes. This is a difficult time and I'm also looking forward to reaching to the other side.

Well done.


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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much, Lisa!! Have a lovely Thanksgiving!!

    Melissa

reply by Lisa Wharton on 25-Nov-2020
    Happy Thanksgiving.
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Amen to that. What is going on?! It is scary, but what a blessing to know that God is in control no matter what and we can leave it in His hands. He is the bridge over the stormy seas. Well done as always. Rox


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
    Hello Roxanna... thank you so much for the lovely review and comments!!
    I hope you enjoy a wonderful Thanksgiving tomorrow!

    Melissa
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Your metaphoric poem is so on the mark about the journey of life. We all have our ups and downs and have to hang in there. Inevitably, when we realize we have His support, it becomes easier.
The poem is lovely in its rhyming and the imagery is outstanding.

Ralf


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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
    Hello Raffaelina. Good morning. Thank you for your wonderful comments... I am delighted you liked it and got something from it! Hugs.

    Melissa
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I certainly admire the rhythm in this. It's very smooth. Your concluding couplet has such truth and feeling in it. There's so much uncertainty in out lives now, we need to have something we can hold on to. In this case, the sea provides the answers. This is very thoughtful, and your word choices are just right to get across your feeling. judi


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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Hello Judi. Thank you for your lovely review... I am so glad it resonated with you. Hugs!!

    Melissa
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You use imagery to great effect in this poem, Melissa. Beautifully metered and rhymed, it gives encouragement to all of us who are going through tough times.

I have my personal challenges to face. But my heart goes out to so many others - like parents struggling to care for young children in this pandemic, in many cases without sufficient financial resources; and to places around our world where people already living on the edge are being pushed further into darkness and despair.

Your poem appears as a beacon of much needed hope and light.

Thank you for sharing.

Stay safe and blessed

Julia


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Hello Julia. Thank you for your wonderful review.
    You have really encouraged me!

    Melissa

reply by juliaSjames on 22-Nov-2020
    You're welcome Melissa m
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Good Morning, Melissa!
Well, I have no idea how I missed this exceptionally well-crafted offering last evening, but I'm glad I did as now I have six stars to affix on your presentation!
What a lovely, heartfelt, faith-redeeming offering.
Your words resonate on a number of levels with me, but your first stanza is my favorite:

I traveled paths of mystery
o'er glens and dales toward the sea.
Through darkened shadows of the wood,
I journeyed on as best I could.

I journey; I stumble, but I continue on ...
Thank you for sharing!
diane


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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Hello Diane. Thank you so much. I appreciate your wonderful comments .. glad you enjoyed it. You have made my day!!!

    Melissa
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Hi Melissa, don't we just all mostly, just love the sea and the feeling of freshness that it brings to us, a fine poem, and many thanks for sharing kind regards Colin xx


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2020



reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Hello Colin... thank you so much for your lovely comments.

    Melissa
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