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Viewing comments for Chapter 80 "To Graduate or Not to Graduate"

A widow's journey into her relationship with her

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Thank you for sharing this story. It is very well-written and every parent can identify with your dismay at your daughter's prank(s). I am sure she has grown into a responsible and good-humoured adult!


 Comment Written 24-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
    Thank you Windy. I really appreciate you stopping by to review this. I like your comments. She has grown up without but she caused a few gray hairs in the process. LOL
    Beth
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Hi Beth. I see you continue to provide excellent imagery troughout this story. like here for instance:

"Sometimes we would go to Audubon Park and take Connie to the zoo, or to City Park where there was a petting zoo and playground equipment. Both parks had very old and beautiful live oak trees that spread their branches over the ground inviting children to climb among the limbs. If we did go to one of the parks, Connie always wanted to invite a friend along."

Bravo Beth. Bob


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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
    Thank you Bob, I appreciate you continuing to read my story. It is nice of you to comment on a part you liked.
    Beth
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Teenagers! I had three at the same time too. They are hard to keep track of and out of trouble. It sounds like you had some troublesome days for a while. Thank goodness she was allowed to Graduate with her brother. Well done, Beth. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Thank you Nancy, I appreciate the review and comments. They were always doing something to give is trouble.
    Beth
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Lol. Kids can amaze you sometimes. She wanted to see her brother graduate so I don't blame her. Ho Ray for the one who dressed her as an old woman. Did Don go on with his singing?
Good one Beth.


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. You might have been upset it was your kid that was taking a chance on not graduating after you'd spent all that money trying to get her a Christian education. I can laugh now. Yes Don continued singing. They didn't appreciate Elvis so much at the Christian collage he attended. It wasn't funny back then. I appreciate the six stars.
    Beth

reply by Ben Colder on 22-Nov-2020
    I do understand. I had three in Christian schools at once. Know the price, known the score. LOL.
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Oh my goodness! How did you ever survive? Christi gave you grief about having a younger daughter but this antic was probably much too stressful for you! So glad she did get her diploma!!

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Pennies, or Kmart (Penney's)
school. when we got another phone call. (comma not period after 'school')
about mid-night (midnight)
"Listen Maam, (Ma'am)
Not sure why you put an apostrophe after "gonna"
This thing's is (thing is or thing's)
two graduates belongings (graduates')


 Comment Written 22-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. Kids are capable of creating stress. I'm not sure how we coped but I guess we came to expect that our lives would have stress. Thank for all the help with the corrections.
    Beth
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Another close call--so clever--kudos to that guy for his ingenious costume plan and to you for the entertainment!

there was [were] always interesting things; preform/ing s/b perform/ing; with [another s/b a] male student


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thank you. I so glad you were entertained. It is pretty funny but it wasn't back then. Thank again for your editing help.
    Beth

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 21-Nov-2020
    As they say, disasters are hilarious in retrospect.
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Yes indeed parenting can take us along many roads - but how life has changed and how different misdemeanours are these days - those were innocent days - an interesting chapter -tough being a parent these days -


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thank you for the review and comment. Yes times have definitely changed.
    Beth
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Hello Beth I read this your chapter for your book
To Graduate or Not to Graduate
telling us what kind of mischief that caused your daughter to get in trouble. My was told is very well written. You had me anticipating if your daughter was going too graduate.



 Comment Written 21-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thank you so much Gert, I really appreciate you reading and comment on this.
    Beth

reply by Gert sherwood on 21-Nov-2020
    You are welcome Beth
    Gert
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Hehehe, Beth, how times have changed since then. Today, something like that would hardly have raised an eyebrow. All the same, I'm glad they booth graduated.
Connie aways wanted to invite a friend along. = Connie always wanted to invite a friend along.
I'm enjoying this story. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thank you for the review and comment. I'm glad you got a chuckle from this. I didn't find it funny at the time but now I do. Those Christian were very uptight about things back then. I'm sure they are more relaxed now. Thanks for noticing the typo.
    Beth
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Great chapter lots of giggles and drama. You do need to edit more closely. Others would mark you down to a 4 with all these silly errors. when (we)took Connie and her friend,

for some unknown [for ]reason.

We w[as](ere) relieved to know that both of my children had passed their finals

They informed us that she (was)not allowed

We were arra(n)[i]g[n]ing to make the trip

That evening, we sat in (the)auditorium

heard mu[m](r)mers around us
talked, in our behalf, to (the)school


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. I usually have my daughter proof read this for me but she couldn't today. Thank you for the help with editing. Some had been corrected but you found four no one else notices.
    Beth
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