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Momentary Pitfalls


A metered Poem

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The Bible states, a good man may fall seven times, but he will get up again. None of us is too powerful to avoid fall and failures in our lives.
Patricia


 Comment Written 13-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
    I appreciate your review Patricia, danger lurks in many places these days, love Dolly x
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"hear the sound of an ambient bell, so's you capture alternative windfalls."
That's brilliant! This poem is particularly cheery and encouraging whilst offering a great deal of wisdom. I especially appreciate "pick yourself up, and don't ever crumble, you are NOT on your own, or a fool." Yes, exactly. Even if we feel alone, and without human help, there are always our angels. And that is no sneezing matter! The righteous man falls seven times and gets up again! Thank you for the inspiration today, Dolly.
Well done!
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 Comment Written 12-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
    Thank you Lucy for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, we have no choice but to pick ourselves up and start again, love Dolly x
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A very well-written poem about times we all experience from time to time when things don't go the way as we planned and the test will be in our reaction to the things that we encountered.


 Comment Written 12-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
    Thank you Sanndra for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x
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This two-stanza poem appears to include the theme of human dignity in spite of 'a moment in time' that may sting or cause a stumble. It has an optimistic tone with a good work ethic. I liked the last two lines very much: pick yourself up, and don't ever crumble,
you are NOT on your own, or a fool.
That is sound advice and motivational as well.


 Comment Written 12-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
    Thank you Crystie for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
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Great message in you anapestic metered poem! Yes, we are not alone and so we do need to observe the golden rule and keep learning from our stumbles in life.


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
    Thank you Helen for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, this meter is challenging, love Dolly x
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I like the way you handled the anapestic trimeter. Great use of those feminine endings. There are times that all of experience downfalls. We hope we can learn from them. We should just pick ourselves up and go on. Our mistakes don't mean that we're fools, and we shouldn't feel like we're alone, either. judi


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
    Thank you Judi for your review, glad you enjoyed the feminine endings too, much appreciated, love Dolly x

reply by judiverse on 12-Jan-2021
    You're very welcome. judi
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Once down it is hard to surface and breath the air, Dolly. Yet, I know that we are not alone someone is looking over us. When we stumble, we hurt, and that is when we need help the most, but why must we wait to need help? Every day we should thank the Lord for our breath. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
    Thank you for your review, I agree with your words here, love Dolly x
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So beware of a fall or a stumble,
and remember the fine golden rule;
pick yourself up, and don't ever crumble,
you are NOT on your own, or a fool.

Thank God we are not a fool. The facts are before us. Don't fall, don't crumble; pick yourself up, shake it off and be humble.


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
    Thank you Rosemary for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
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This poem is a good reminder that the difficult things that "sting" us are only a blip in the total spectrum of time. I like the ending thought, that we are not on our own in the hard times. I'm sorry, but I don't understand your comment about feminine endings adding a syllable to some lines. Otherwise, you've given yourself a tough challenge with the use of the anapestic trimeter rhythms, and you've handled it well.


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
    Hi Carol, a feminine ending simply means that the final word ends with an unstressed syllable. I really appreciate your review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x

reply by Carol Clark2 on 11-Jan-2021
    Thank you for the explanation. I'm glad to learn something new!
    Carol
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This was very sound advise, Dolly. I think few people remember that we are indeed able to go on. We just have to as you said pick ourselves up, brush ourselves off and continue with what ever life dishes us. Very well done.


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
    Thank you for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x

reply by aryr on 12-Jan-2021
    So welcome Dolly
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