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The Hungry Bear


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A very well-written pinned decimal about the hungry bear whose hunger dared him to be keen and find something to eat and fill his tummy to survive and licked his s chin.


 Comment Written 15-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
    Thank you Sandra for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x
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Another new form! Dolly, you are so creative. Loved it.
This bear looks hungry and he is enjoying his meal. What an adorable animal. Great picture. Loved your rhyme scheme and meter, it was creative and sounded quite effortless.

Thank you for introducing another form.

Love, Muse


 Comment Written 15-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
    Thank you for your review, yes I have created eleven forms since writing poetry, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x
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Ha, I really enjoyed this one, Dolly. You captured the joy of the grizzly having a snack or three. They don't know how lucky they are not having to wash dishes.

A most enjoyable read this evening. :))

Gloria


 Comment Written 15-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
    Thank you Gloria for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x
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Ah fresh sashimi - I'm sure the bear is a connoisseur of all kinds of foods, especially fresh fish! Thanks for the fun pinned decimal poem, giving us a real picture of a bear driven by hunger.


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
    Thank you Helen for your review, thank goodness we don?t have bears in the UK! Love Dolly x
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That's a wonderful artwork choice. Animals are so adorable. That must have been a scared little beaver. I think bears usually eat out all the fish and campers packings. And I enjoyed your poem. Nicely done. Great work :)


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
    Thank you Alicia for your review, animals are adorable, but bears are powerful and dangerous, love Dolly x
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A very artful observation. Good that the observer was out of sight for it could have been he that was something raw. The animals do have to survive.

"He needs to eat, survive, be brave,
and skulk about, escape the grave." Alas!

Ralf


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
    Thank you Raffaelina for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
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This pinned decimal, The Hungry Bear, follows the proper formatting and finds that a bear can find his needs just about anywhere and enjoy it in the sam3 place.


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
    Thank you Bill for you review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x
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Dolly,

hahahahaha What fun! And, at the moment, I am waiting for something to come out of the oven - so this actually MADE ME HUNGRY! hahaha

The last part really struck me as extra clever. Great descriptive phrases that put us in the bear's skin as he devoured his lunch. Thanks for the smile~


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
    Thank you Robyn for your review, glad you enjoyed this one, love Dolly x
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Beautiful, Dolly. Everyone loves bears and is fascinated by them. Neat photo of a true wonder!

Line 5: Wouldn't it need to be "He needs to eat, survive, be brave," so as to match the singularity of the bear in the rest of the poem?

Have a great day!
Hugs, Lucy


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
    Excellent suggestion Lucy, I really appreciate your helpful review, what a gem you are, love Dolly x
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This is a nicely written poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. Nice presentation. Wow! What an Amazing photo Of the bear feasting. Very well done.


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2021
    Thank you Joanne for your review, much appreciated, love Dolly x
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