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The homestead sits empty


Remembering mother on her birthday

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Jannypan (Jan)
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This is a great tribute to your mom on her birthday as well as to your family, Joanne. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines are filled with great imagery and emotion.

May I suggest ~

Today it's your birthday Mom(,) and it hurts so much to know we can't pick up the phone and just call to say hello.

The homestead it(delete 'it') sits empty only memories remain of our childhood home with you and Daddy(add a dash) things can never be the same.

We know your( you're ) where you want to be with Daddy once again. I'm sure he missed you oh so much and is happy your( to be) together again.

We were blessed and fortunate to have had you for such a very long time.

Your time had come God called your home to heaven in the divine.

We will always miss you, from days to months to years.

With time(,) there will come healing where sweet memories replace the tears.

We will always cherish the time we got to spend with the both of you.

May our future be filled with hope and our memories help us through.

Respectfully, Jan



 Comment Written 31-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    Thankyou so much for your great review and for your help 🙂
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Sally Law
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I hope my children feel this way and come to visit. We all miss that freedom to travel far. I'm blessed that most of my family is close by. Sending you my best today and blessings always,
Sal XOs....


 Comment Written 31-Jan-2021



reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    Thank you
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