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Finding my identity in God -not in illness

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This is a wonderful poem, quite unique. It is very open and honest and a great testimony to the loving, caring, searching heart of God who loves us with an everlasting and deep love and joy. Creative writing, very moving theme.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading
    I was not able to write for almost a year - I tried. I think God had to grow my a heart a bit. I am getting so much joy from just writing.
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I found this to be a well made poem. I like the repeating first line of each stanza and the descriptive nature following each, all in keeping with your theme.

I classifying as a spiritual poem may suit it better.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading
    I just submitted something tonight and I saw where I could classify it. So I agree.
    I haven?t written for awhile - but thank goodness my words are coming back. God is always faithful.
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I like the wordings of the picture. "God you have been so good to me." Everyone should have faith to cope with Life's ups and downs.

Like the poem's line of "under the laugh." It is true that under the laugh, it I can be both joy or sorrow.

Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 24-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading.
    I chose to write this, because I do like to laugh. But I also need to learn to be vulnerable and show the pain with people I trust.
    I want to be genuine- and have the laughter come from joy.
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I'm very happy for you. It's been a time of discovery for you and I'm glad it led to personal satisfaction in your life. I really love how you formatted your poem, from despair to joy.


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading.
    I beginning to see every act of God a redemption story within another etc.
    I do not know how much more clearly that God can show us that He is willing to give us us joy if we follow Him. Does not mean it will be easy, but every time I do go let God help me to move forward- it gets easier to trust.
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Really love this! Not only did i enjoy and understand the feelings behind the poem, but the description too... last winter my mental health almost got the best of me and despite the pandemic 2020 was a recovery and discovery year for me. I really felt this, well done!


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading
    This was a piece I felt uneasy about submitting. I used very little words. I wanted the words to be stark and the themes behind them stick out.
    It outlines my progression to the other side of faith, where the laughter becomes true. A hard year that pushed me to lean on God. I found joy - now I know what it is.
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This poem gives many examples of the things that lie beneath the surface veneer we present to the world, the inner turbulence and tribulation. The greater honesty we give to communications with our God can indeed be a means of salvation.


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading.
    I have spent so much time in the sad places of my life -trying to sell an image to everyone I knew. I did not need anything. I spent some uncomfortable time this year sitting with emotions. God did push me to the other side of sadness into joy.

reply by tfawcus on 14-Feb-2021
    One of the advantages of a site like this is having the ability to express one's emotions and sort out one's ideas about life at one step removed. So glad that things are beginning to work out for you.
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In order to write and write properly?
In order to write and write properly with distinction.
And, then we first need a subject.
Out the 100, 000's.
(I've written in 17 years)
I most likely and almost always get it from above!
when I liked about this was not just the theme and imagery but also your Objective Contents.
You then also then laced it well with Adjective Contents.
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There was no Grammar issues in it flowed well.
Theme and Imagery were appropriate.
As well as Adjective and Objective Contents
(Previously noted)
And finally Descriptive Measures lined up Perfectly.
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 Comment Written 12-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading
    I tend to find my reviewers write better reviews than any submission I make. It rather amuses me. I like that I get that one step further from what others speak to me.
    I can not write the good stuff, unless it comes straight from God to my heart. Sure I can craft stories, which I do. Flash fiction has helped me to simplify my writing. I usually have a specific point I am trying to make.
    I wait for the words. The older I get, the more I enjoy sitting with God processing what I study and learn from my experiences in this life.

reply by Ricky1024 on 14-Feb-2021
    Thank you for your sincerity Miss FlyAway!
    Yes but I've learned it out 18 year writing career.
    ( basically based on journaling my grief)
    Is exactly what you said.
    That it's all coming by God.
    Being that this is Sabbath Sunday.
    And, that I am a Latter-Day Saint Priest with the Church of Jesus Christ.
    All my work will be dedicated to him on this Day.
    As it is every Sunday!
    Ricky
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I really like the style and form of this deeply expressive poem. It's probably true that beneath the laughter lie many of the things you mean. I like the way you converted laughter from a protective facade, a shield perhaps, to a joy-filled gift from
God.


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading
    I really did take out all the words except the themes I wanted to express. This is progression of my life into finding my identity in God. I am not trying to cover, what I feel with laughter anymore.

reply by Susan Newell on 14-Feb-2021
    I am goad to hear that.
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What a great piece of writing. Laughter can have so many meanings. I like the content as well as the poetic form. A lot of meaning conveyed in minimum words. You have proved 'brevity is a charm of eloquence!'


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading
    I was somewhat hesitant to post this piece. I took our all the words to get to the core emotion. It definitively is a progression of my life - the before and the now.
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Flyaway,
This poem is so inspirational, and I found strength within myself , that had been asleep before.I only found one typo: is there a stray 'k' after the 'y' in vulnerability?
Otherwise your poem is beautiful and contest worthy.
Good luck.
Cindy


 Comment Written 11-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
    Thank you for reading
    I was somewhat hesitant to post this piece. I took our all the words to get to the core emotion. It definitively is a progression of my life - the before and the now.
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