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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "When the God's Away"

The Quarterback from Mt. Olympus

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Hi again

I like the title of this one and the content too.
very funny especially the third verse
I am sure that this book when complete will be a hit
well done


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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Now I've got that 11 eleven syllables thing worked out, I can go ahead and compliment you freely on these poems. LOL

to that elusive kid from USC. (USC? What about your international fans who don't understand these?)



 Comment Written 17-May-2006


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OHHHH good job making most people have to think back to high school or do a quick google.... The style and meter for this is perfect and I know that you want solid reviews that help but unfortunately I can't find anything to nit about and that's making me sad (hmm did that make sense to you?) :)



 Comment Written 16-May-2006


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LOL! The cunning wife shows who's really the head honcho around there, eh? Sounds like my house. ;)

ALways SO good to see you!

mel


 Comment Written 13-May-2006


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Smile...:)

Oh my---aren't we sneaky...?...:)
Lock him in indeed---heads will roll...

And then you add another layer with a promise to Persephone...and when Zeus finds out....oh boy!

Loving this series David
Thank you for crating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

Excellent presentation!



 Comment Written 09-May-2006


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and shifts attention to a pressing matter
(concerning the condition of his bladder).
At his departure, Hera sports a grin,
and whispers to Hephaestus, "Lock him in."

i always thought that Hera is supposed to be somewhat meddlesome


 Comment Written 05-May-2006


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Hey David,

This is a great follow up. I love the shift in S3 with the first 2 lines. It picks the pace up nicely and works very well.

The humour is good, and you know I like a good sport's story :-)

Cheers
Sean


 Comment Written 02-May-2006


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Zounds!! Zeus can't turn his back on them for a minute, can he? What fools those mortals be! Clever turn of words, Marillion. Top-notch as always.


 Comment Written 01-May-2006


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This was clever, original, and wryly penned. I expect nothing less from you! However, I found the following stanza to be pure genius:

and shifts attention to a pressing matter
(concerning the condition of his bladder).
At his departure, Hera sports a grin,
and whispers to Hephaestus, "Lock him in."

I can just picture this interaction. Well done!!


 Comment Written 01-May-2006


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Hi David,

"Be silent, woman!" counters Zeus, irate.
"I won't endure mistakes on third-and-eight!

This just cracked me up. I'm not entirely sure Hera would appreciate being called 'woman'!
I like the idea of humanizing Zeus. You know, I've always pictured him as being some kind of glorified 'Charlton Heston as Moses'-with a white light surrounding him, wearing a white toga and gold accents. Go figure!

Totally enjoyed this.
Take care,
Sissy


 Comment Written 01-May-2006


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