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Jealously is hard to overcome.

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Robyn Cornum wrote a story suggesting we go into our friends portfolios and give a review on a work that's one short of the Recognized blue ribbon or All Time Best Status. I thought it was a great idea so I'm reviewing this work for you. Pay it forward.


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the review. I will certainly pay in forward. This is a nice idea
    Beth
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Beth, you tell it like it is. We all have the green-eyed monster episodes in our lives and learn to get over it, thank God. I experienced once when my mother helped a friend who was mentally ill, by taking care of her little girl. I could not bear it. I was not a happy camper. Yes, it takes over when we are young but if we're smart we learn to conquer it. Right?

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 Comment Written 21-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
    Yes, right. I have many stories of my younger years when the green eyed monster came out in me, I haven't had in jealousy feeling in years so I must have gotten past it, but it does still surface in a daughter.
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Such a sweet story, Bethshelby. I love that you were jealous of Shirley Temple...that is so sweet. And, it sounds like you weren't the only one visited by the green eyed monster. Love the artwork that you included with your entry. All the very best with the contest.


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
    Thank you Lyn. I guess I passed on the trait to my daughter who says I ruined her life, in spite of the fact, i was surprised as she was when I was was pregnant again that last time. LOL
    Beth
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Dear Beth, this true story raises a very interesting subject. Is jealousy inherent in the human psyche, or is it only some of them, that are so infected by it that they do physical damage to the person that they feel has usurped their position.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    I was very fortunate that I married a man who never provided me with any reason to feel jealousy. At work I experienced people being jealous of me for one reason or another. I've not felt jealousy for many years but I think my Dad may have been a jealous person when he was young..
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No Not mine! I loved my little brother. Still do. However my sister was five years older than I and she hated me from the first day I arrived to the last time she saw me and she hated mother for having another baby. Maybe age changed her, but it hadn't in 2009 when we had the last contact.
Interesting story. Good Luck in the contest Beth.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    Thank you Nancy. I appreciate the review. Your sister sounds like my Christi. She has a love/hate relationship with Connie.
    Beth
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What an interesting story about your childhood years. I like how you have shown this happened to your daughter Kristi as well. I'm here to tell you, having a sibling isn't all it's cracked up to be. I have a younger brother, and he was and still is a royal pain in my butt, lol. Blackmailing me for my allowance, tattling every time I turned around. We never played together. He did his thing; I did mine.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    I guess it all depends on the kids. Some bond and do everything together and some can't stand each other. LOL Thank you for the review and comments.
    Beth
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I had to smile. My oldest son, used to wish he was an only child. He didn't want this younger 3 brothers. I find it interesting that he and his wife only have one child. The rest of the boys have more. Good luck with the contest.

In the forties and fifties when you bought a picture frame for an 8 x !0 or 5 x 7 (8 X 10???)

"No, she is ugly," I declared. Why is she here?" (Missing beginning quotation marks before Why)


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the review. I enjoyed you comments. people are funny. My dad was an only child and he didn't any children. I wanted a lot of children because I was an only child. Thanks for the help. I beginning to think, I must be going blind.
    Beth
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Good morning, Beth! Hasn't every young child entertained the green-eyed monster a time or two. The artwork was perfect for your story. I have one adult child who still clings to the monster now and then -- afraid I will give or do for one and not them. Tears!! Have a great day!

Caught just a few suggestions:

8 X !0 (8 x 10)
greeneyed (green-eyed)
moviestar (movie star)
sausage shaped (sausage-shaped)
tendancy (tendency)
again, (comma not needed)


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the review and comments. I had Green-eyed and movie star divided to begin with,but I looked on a site and found them connected. When I connected them the spell checker didn't change it so I decided I was wrong and left them that way. I've separated them again. I saw that deadline was coming up and wrote this while I was half-asleep. Thanks for catching the errors.
    Beth

reply by Begin Again on 19-Feb-2021
    Not a problem at all - I make plenty of mistakes these days... too many cobwebs in the way I guess. Smiles!
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I find this quite interesting because I felt like an only child - I was the one born ten years after the third child! My brother would have been happy if I'd been a boy, but since I wasn't he threatened to run away from home, so I'm told. :)

Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the review and comments. My son who was also ten when the youngest was born, asked the doctor if he would go back and look again to see if there was boy baby there. He and his sister were twins and he wanted me to have a boy because I had two girls all ready.
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Thanks for sharing from your childhood. I'm glad that you had four kids. That must have been a lot of adjustment for you as you didn't have that model of being referee. Best wishes in the contest!
Typos and punctuation:
My grandparents home was my favorite place (grandparents')
an 8 X !0 or 5 X 7 (8 x 10)
an adorable litlle girl
"No, she ugly, I declared. Why ("No, she's ugly," I declared. "Why )
"We think she [is] pretty.
she ever found [it] after [I] put it
The greeneyed monster (green-eyed)
when I grew us (up)
Thee were (There)
praised others children (other)


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    This thing got on put out their before I got a chance to read through it I was hoping no one would read it until I got a chance. When I did I found tons of errors. I hope I corrected them all but I'll check your list just in case. I'm having trouble with the promotions. I used over 100 member dollars in one day, trying to promote two stories. This one never came off the 91 position. I contacted Tom and he claimed there was no problem.

reply by lyenochka on 19-Feb-2021
    Sometimes there are inexplicable glitches. I looked at the front page and your profile and couldn't figure out what the ranking of the post is. Anyway, glad you got it edited.
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