The poem presents perfect imagery with a dash of humor. The illustration is gorgeous, capturing the focus of the penguin on his potential meal.
And as usual, I learned something from your notes. Win-win all around!
Boy, I have to get to the Central Park Zoo in Manhattan or the aquarium in Brooklyn before I can see a penguin. I see yours are coming for a formal dinner, dressed in their tuxedoes. Your poem is cute, and I love the fact that you use alliteration in all three lines.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2021
I feel so blessed to live in an area of such wildlife diversity. My city, Dunedin, is knows as the wildlife capital of New Zealand.
reply by Michele Harber on 04-Mar-2021
It sounds like an incredible place. I hope I'll get to see it at some point. I've never been to that part of the world.
You did a great job with your 575, Lisa. Your syllable count is correct per line, your painting is exquisite, and your message is clear. I like the good use of alliteration of s and d. I like the way you used 'dashing; to show two definitions of the word--moving quickly and looking smart all dressed up. Thanks for the informative notes, too.
I find your poem such a pleasure to read, and your author's note educational (two for one). Thanks so much for the education. I can not imagine living in a place where yellow-eyed penguins are in residence (I see a lot of robins and an occasional blue heron).
This is a beautiful poetic description of a Yellow-eyed penguin, incorporating the creative use of alliteration. I also love the artwork. Varied shades of blue are my favorite colors. Thanks for your informative author's note.
Those tuxedo dudes are always dressed for dinner, Jenny. When swimming
they look like they are dancing. Still, they become dinner for sharks, and some men like their meat and use their skins. I glad they are protected, they're beautiful to see in the sea dancing freely. :) Thank you for sharing.