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Fifty Days of Friendship


Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "First Friends"

A first person story about various friends.

  22 total reviews 
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Raffaelina Lowcock
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So at this stage you really hadn't clued in on the best friend thing, it was always just a bunch of you getting together for baseball or whatever the game was.

Ralf


 Comment Written 08-Apr-2021



reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
    I have never had what I*d describe as a best friend until my second wife.
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Bill,
Your strong characterization keeps me wanting more of your story. I'm of your same generation, and I think we had it tough.
Exceptional work, Bill. Very worthy of six stars.


 Comment Written 30-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
    I wonder if our parents ever wondered where we were all day?

reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 30-Mar-2021
    Mine were worried we?d come back. Lol
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I'll bet you learned to fight after your encounter with Lloydy. Too bad you didn't ask for a rematch to win back the girl's affections. Very nice job. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 29-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
    I didn't even know I was fighting for anything. : )
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Great travel both in time and places!! Perfect description of the doubts and uncertainties that a young boy faces in his evolution to become a man. Decision are tough sometimes (like the one to be part of a fist fight), and did not think of consequences, clearly described in all your conclusion. Again, perfect travel in time and places! Thanks for sharing!


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you, palmart

reply by palmart on 29-Mar-2021
    You´re very welcome, Bill!

    Have a Great Easter Season!!
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On a day when I needed a smile, Bill, this was a wonderfully well-written story. This was very entertaining, all those cousins, I myself had 18 first cousins. Little girls can be a little fickled.
Thank you for the read.
Regards,
Mary



 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you, Mary, for the great review. Glad this was timely and amusing. Bill
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Fantastic conclusion. A story within a story. I was not expecting the irony or the psychological aspects, well, at least not so poignant.
Just very good writing.
I could have read a few more chapters.
What about a book Bill?
Writing like this can only be a best.
I would read from the start.
My best.
Have a great Sunday.
RG


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the great review, RG. There are two chapters before this that are still promoted.
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-Good image and story, Bill.
-I enjoyed reading it.
-Good descriptive detail
about where you grew up
and how things were done
back in the day.
-I can relate to growing up
in a small town, although none
of my relatives lived there except
my mom and dad!
-It must have been a strange
experience, and certainly led
to some dramatic moments in
your life.
-Thanks for sharing the story.


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021



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    Thank you, Pam

reply by Pam (respa) on 28-Mar-2021
    You are welcome, Bill.
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Your story is very well written and you do a marvelous job of character descriptions and developing them as you go. Your ending brings the reader in and interested... and a little compassionate too. :). Well done, Bill.

Melissa


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you, Melissa.
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Not sure if this is a true story Bill, but it was certainly entertaining and you made me smile. All those cousins of yours to play with as friend, you were lucky, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    It is as factual as I can recall, Dolly. I didn?t even change the names.

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 28-Mar-2021
    A sweet and endearing recollection Bill x

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 28-Mar-2021
    were you expelled?

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Yes - from high school my senior year.
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These memories I can relate to, my father a country copper, we had to move every two years, the new boy (me) on the block always got the attention of the girls and the wrath of the boys, very well written, I enjoyed this read very much****kahpot


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you, kahpot. I replaced my magnetic qualities with repellant ones over time. : )
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