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Striped Pyjamas


A life for a life

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This is a wonderful free verse Kay and youve told this story well for the stripes challenge. An emotional story of the changing of the striped pajamas and the repercussions. Great write, cheers valda


 Comment Written 09-May-2021



reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thanks so much Valda. We can learn much from children. Love, Kay.
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Dear Aussie,

What a great piece! The writing and story telling drew me in instantly. The way you addressed the German-Jew clash through the lens of children is fantastic. It is filled with pure innocence and sheer curiosity which is endearing.
To establish such a meaningful relationship in a prison through the barbed wire fence is symbolic. The outside speaks of freedom and life while the inside smells of horror and death- a beautiful imagery. What I find genius is the interpretation of a prisoner's attire as striped pyjamas.
Bravo my friend!
This is a very special poem you have written here!

Cheers,
DJ


 Comment Written 05-May-2021



reply by the author on 05-May-2021
    Hello my new friend, Thank you for your in-depth review. Much appreciated. Blessings, Kay xx
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I saw the movie this picture came from and it is a very memorable one. It highlights the horrible atrocities of war from the viewpoint of innocent children. You have done a commendable effort in your poetic quatrain sharing. It is a very powerful Poem of the Month contestant, Kay. Best of wishes! xo Janet


 Comment Written 03-May-2021



reply by the author on 04-May-2021
    Hello Janet, Thanks so much for reading and the six star rating. Innocent children give so much and it was a friendship built on trust. How many adults would give their life for a Jewish prisoner? Blessings, Kay XX
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Excellent poem about a very sad exchange. I remember years ago a movie was made about this which I am sure is from the book you mention. Excellent story in poetic form.


 Comment Written 01-May-2021



reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    Thank you Elaine. K xx
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Excellent response to this prompt, K. I just watched the movie a few months ago, where both boys wearing striped pyjamas entered the gas chamber and were killed and all that was left for the father in charge of the camp to find was his son's clothing outside the wire fence enclosing the concentration camp.

You have done a fabulous job of this. It was such a sad movie, and I am glad you have reminded me of it again.

Very well done my friend. :)

Gloria


 Comment Written 01-May-2021



reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Blessings my friend. Shalom K xx
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This is a beautifully written story, but a horrible story about horrible events. The German father who cared nothing about a Jewish boy's life could possibly kill his own boy. Rightfully so, this poem leaves the reader with an uneasy feeling.


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2021



reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    I think you have the meaning backwards. The children changed clothes and the German boy decided to take the Jewish boy's place. So, the father had nothing to do with it. Thanks for reading, much appreciated. K xx

reply by LJbutterfly on 01-May-2021
    Hi Aussie,
    It's possible I misunderstood. Here is what I thought and why:
    Stanza 1, line 1: The German boy stared at the fence.
    Line 4: His father in charge of the prison.

    Stanza 5: The German boy said, Line 3: "My father is camp Commandant

    The boys exchange clothing

    Stanza 9, Line 3: The German Commandant cried "Where is my boy?

    My interpretation: His boy was wearing the striped pajamas of a Jew. The father, the Commandant, cared nothing about Jewish boys, but now his own son was wearing the clothing of a Jewish boy, meaning his son may be set up to die at the Commandant's command.

    Either way, this is a powerful story.
    Lorraine

reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    You are right on each count. The boys exchanged clothes and the German boy went to the gas chamber. K xx
    A life for a life.

reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    PPS his son had already died.
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Oh, my God this is so moving and filled with love and sacrifice! I gives me shivers all over. May we never, ever again experience such unGodly treatment and terror. This story catches the heart in its grasp and won't let go. Great writing here!!


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2021



reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Hello Sherry, Thanks so much for reading. Grim times and yes, may it never happen again. Blessings, K.

reply by Sherry Asbury on 01-May-2021
    Blessings to you!!
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I remember this movie. It was heart wrenching. This young boy shows the meaning of sacrifice and atonement for his father's sin.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2021



reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Hello Joan, Many thanks for reading. You too keep writing and stay healthy. Blessings, K.

reply by dragonpoet on 01-May-2021
    You are most kindly welcome, Aussie.
    I will try to do both.
    Joan
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You have really plucked my heartstrings with this one. The one good thing I can take away from the children's trick is that the German father realized what the Jews were going through. But how horrifying for the little German boy when he learned what would happen to him. You've re-told the story very well.


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2021



reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Hello friend, Thanks so much for reading. I don't think the German boy really understood what was going on because his father hid it from him. Blessings, K.

reply by damommy on 01-May-2021
    No, he didn't. He thought he was helping a friend. Little did he know what would happen. So sad.
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This was amazing Kace. It was a wonderful free verse and your words did indeed portray that there is no greater love than laying down one's life for a friend. As I read your words I remembered the film, I cried then as I do now because of the importance of your words.


 Comment Written 30-Apr-2021



reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Alie, To have moved you to tears means you really could see the truth of the story/poem. I was moved to write it. Pax Domini my friend. K xx

reply by aryr on 01-May-2021
    I did indeed Kace and you are so welcome. Pax Domini as well.
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