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Forbidden Love

Cousins unwittingly fall in love.

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dellsworthpoet

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Just one grammar suggestion. In the second line to keep misunderstand vs. misunderstanding I would change with to and. With seems to demand a noun, while and links it closer with the verb wakes. Nicely understated.

Comment Written 05-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021

Thank you for the review and also for the suggestion. I appreciate your stopping by.
Beth

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Beth,

Interesting love trap you've written about. Technique in your free verse is awesome. Metaphors well used.

I guess the English crown is full of this incestual garbage.

Anna

Comment Written 03-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021

Thank you Anna Linda. I think this is probably true. President Roosevelt married his first cousin but then he had mistress as well.
I apprecaite your comments.
Beth

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Rosemary Everson1

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I think this happens way too often. Some even marry in time. In some parts of the world, marrying your first cousin is socially acceptable; in the United States, it's a bit more taboo.

Comment Written 03-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021

Thank you Rosemary. It isn't illigal in most states but because intermarrying has carries with a chance a physical imparments, it is frowned on. As you say it does happen a lot. President Roosevelt married his first cousin. I appreciate the review.
Beth

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Iza Deleanu

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What a Shakespearean tragedy - cousins lost as lovers bound by fate in regret
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and your writings.

Comment Written 03-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021

Thank you again for reviewing and commenting on this one. I really appreciate it.
Beth

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Katie Mae Dead

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Dear poet,

This is so nice and smoothly done.
I love the opening lines...there comes a time on life when nature wakes with yearning youthful minds misunderstand.
Good strong rhymes and rhythm.
Good luck in the contest!
Katiemae

Comment Written 03-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021

Thank you so much KatieMae. I appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth

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A wonderful sad read, sometimes the heart just loves what it feels and receives, when two people spend time together love does evolve, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

Comment Written 02-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021

Thank you so much for the review and comments. I really appreciate it.
Beth

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Emotions and feelings come forth in your words. Your poem reads like a mini movie with a sad ending. Excellent use of rhyming words and a smooth flow of lines. The last verse being two lines, fits the poem perfectly.

Comment Written 02-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021

Thank you so much for the review. I enjoyed reading your comments.
Beth

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A well-crafted sonnet on a tender theme, love and regret. This is excellently written and so readable, Beth. I enjoyed the lilt and musicality of it all, as well as the delicately worded story of teens awakening to love and temptation. A good entry in the contest. I wish you success. MM

Comment Written 02-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021

Thank you so much for the review and I'm so glad you like it. I enjoyed your comments.
Beth

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My very first kiss came from my cousin, Mark. We lived in different stated so nothing ever came of it. Both families were visiting out Grandparents. Anyway, along the lines of your poem, I have often wondered about half-siblings who didn't know they were related falling in love. Maybe their parents didn't tell them. Hmm, Anyway, I enjoyed reading your sonnet. It flowed well. Good luck.

Comment Written 02-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021

Thank you Barbara, I appreciate the review and comments. I have to confess my first kiss came from a cousin to. Like your cousin, he lived in another state, so we seldom saw each other, but I can see how this could easily happen.

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Joanne Gill

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This is a nicely written poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme.beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Sad situation two cousins fall in love. Good luck in the contest.

Comment Written 02-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021

Thank you Joanne, I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth

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