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Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Football Chapter 21 part2"

A mother faces life's struggles.

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I thought you did a great job with this heart to heart talk between Gabriel and Katherine, as they sit over coffee in the kitchen. The down home atmosphere really makes it a scene that is so familiar to all of us that we can see ourselves there easily. And we have some great interplay between them in this dialogue, as they dance around their attraction for each other, the tensions between them, the jealousy Katherine feels and the need for Gabriel to explain, to get back into her good graces. The tearful apology by her at the end closes the scene perfectly and sets us up to move forward to the next level in the relationship. estory


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
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You have a very romantic story going here. Ouch, I think she is perhaps a beauty outside and inside. But to have someone shine a light through the window is a little scary!


 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    It is very scary. Thank you
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Great chapter! Really glad that they have now cleared the air, and are ready to move forward. Gabe seems very sincere and honest, and he is trying hard to encourage Katherine and build up her self esteem. I am looking forward to seeing what transpires next, as I am sure life won't continue smoothly for them from now on. Something will happen. Looking forward to the next!


 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    No, there will be plenty of issues this couple needs to get over. Thank you.
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barbara:

I'm not sure what changes you made as I've not been able to review since last Friday because I brought my laptop to Cherry Grove (Myrtle Beach), SC where I am vacationing with my family - but neglected to bring my charger. Of course, none of my other electronics have a similar charger. Anyway, I love this chapter, as I always love your work.

Jan


 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Thank you and I hope you have a great vacation. I have enjoyed Myrtle Beach myself.
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This chapter makes me ask that question: why are women stupid and feel completed in front of someone who have a different life and look:"Katherine tapped her coffee cup. "Because she's younger, prettier, and doesn't have a lot of extra baggage. She's a lot of things I'm not. You're used to being with beautiful models with perfect figures, make-up, and hair." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
    I think our society makes women believe a lot of things that are determental to women as a whole. Thank you for the kind review.
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That was very honest to God talk ,frank and direct .I appreciated the entire explanation by Gabriel. This was a very touching chapter ,two adults treating their feelings with respect.


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
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Very well done. I like the way you have built the trial into romance and for certain a trial toward marriage. All deserve a good life together. Another good one Barb. I voted for you.


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
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It's going to be impossible for them to take it slow with all the Gabriel kisses and now telling her how sexier Katherine is. Whew! I'm glad there was a lot of dialogue. It's a great way to keep the story interesting and moving. Great chapter.


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
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This is some mighty fine writing that twists a readers gut more than a good thriller. It's a new beginning. Or better described as turning up the heat full throttle. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 05-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
    Let's hope, but I feat these two are still going to have some issues. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Ric Myworld on 05-Jul-2021
    Well . . . I guess you would, since you have the inside story. LOL
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Aww, Gabriel is sweet, pushy, willing to change for the better, and has picked a good person to spend the rest of his life with. Katherine shouldn't worry about a thing! This has to be one of the best chapters yet. Taking it slow might be impossible for the two of them if its going at this pace... WHICH I LOVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! Can't wait to read the next chapter!!


 Comment Written 05-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
    I think slow and steady is the best answer. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

reply by AJ McCall on 05-Jul-2021
    You're welcome!
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