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Fox and Felix Fine: First Case 3

a one-scene script with Fox and Felix Fine

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Bill,

I had no idea that Felix was such a canny fighter/ defender. I am surprised, actually? I woulda thought a feather floating through the air might have knocked him out. He's a scary dude. On to the next!


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
    Felix is the mad dog you keep on a short leash.
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These two, Felix and Fox, are hilarious. Their manner of questioning is quite unique and they don't have a clue when it comes to names. LOL Also, they don't believe anything anybody says.

Ralf


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    Thanks, Ralf
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Who would have thought that these two had some aggression and skills, they have got to a turning point in the case as well, very well written, I am still enjoying the humor very much****kahpot


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    Thank you, kahpot.
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Felix seems to be quick tempered and ready for a fight, but you can expect that of PIs. That surely isn't a very busy airfield. They aren't open very much. Fox appeals to Fay, who isn't very pleasant herself, to help them find Kitty. Oh, goodness, Felix make a threat at the end. I hope they find Kitty soon, because the clock is ticking. judi


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    Thanks, Judi. The time drives the boys aggressiveness.

reply by judiverse on 12-Jul-2021
    You're very welcome. The are playing beat the clock. judi
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Oh my! I guess Fox and Felix are playing Good Cop/Bad Cop but Felix is really continuing to be a liability. I don't know why Fay tried to do the roundhouse kick when she couldn't deliver. Hope they can make her talk without any violence!


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    I?m trying to keep the story line high paced and compelling.
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Well, I must say your erstwhile characters have an odd procedural: floor 'em first, then threaten them with death if they don't comply. It does make me wonder how much they know going or whether they simply play the odds. I am ecstatic, though, that I have a six to give you.


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    Thank you so much, Jay. I find that Felix is a type of person that I worked with a lot in the Marines. They have to be on a short leash, and are usually not welcome at social events. When you need a sledgehammer or someone who knocks heads together for truth, justice and the American way, he's your guy.
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This is a scary detective agency. They call their clients liers and leave them on the floor. If they don' t help them solve the crime there's no reason to keep them alive. Doesn't sound like the place to go for help. It should be interesting to see how long they contiune to operate.


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    I'm glad you are confused, Beth. This is my approach on this one.
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I love the comedy routine that you invariably include with this mixed up, crime sniffing, duo. Wonderful and clever play on words, especially with names. Great job, Bill. A fun read.

Melissa


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    Thanks, Melissa.
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This is a well-paced script, with plenty of room for potential in the continuation. Its only problem is that it is slightly muddled, and perhaps the next episode will benefit from an extra tweaking at the revision stage


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    This is the third scene so you may get clarity from reading the others. I will, of course, give everything a nip and tuck in the eleventh hour. Thanks for giving this a look, Katherine.
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These two are cracking me up! Their one-liners, Felix's lack of seriousness, and his name changing just make me laugh out loud. I appreciate you providing me an almost daily chuckle. Thanks, Bill! Sally

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 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Sally, for the great review. Bill
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