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Moody Clouds


a tanka

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Those dang billowing clouds! Always waiting to pounce! Of course, just at the right time...lol Nice little cloudy Tanka, perfect image too. Well done! :-)


 Comment Written 10-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
    Thanks, Susan, for giving this a look.
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I like this presentation-it brings to mind that if we did not have weather to talk about, many conversations would not happen. I love the clouds and the weather they bring. Well done.


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Thank you, equestrik.
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I like your descriptive Tanka poem about nature. It flows well but your second line has 8 syllables. You should have 7 syllables in the second line. Your artwork choice goes well with your message and good alliteration of t and f letters and sounds in your last sentence. Best wishes!


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Conspiring is three syllables, Angel. If that is why you dinged me, you will find I am correct. Happy day.
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A very skillfully composed poem perfectly meeting the requirements o f the contest. A cloud does not know where exactly it is going to burst!:) To the human eye, they appear to take on shapes of whatever our imagination can conjure up. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Seshadri
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Absolutely true. Man is definitely at the mercy of nature, which is controlled ultimately by God Himself. A well-written Tanka, and I like both the alliteration and the internal rhyme of drench/mensch (which also avoids repetition of "men". Clever. Good wishes for the contest.


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Wendy
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" fate from clouds" very clever and imaginative, love the opening line, very well written and presented and best wishes for your contest****kahpot


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2021



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    Thank you, kahpot.
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Ingenious tanka--clever pivot--drench mensch is a witty bit of whimsy--unexpected in a tanka--I don't know wht the judges will think of it but I like it!


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Elizabeth
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The author's words are interesting, expressed well, descriptive and
creative. I pondered on the theme of these words. The artwork is
awesome and compliments both the words and theme of this poem.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Thanks, Harmony
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I chuckled at the rhyming "drench mensch" in the middle line. I like the pivot there from the clouds and then the second half of the poem focuses on mankind's need for the rains the right times. Best wishes in the contest!


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Thank you, lyenochka, for the excellent review.
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Yes indeed, in a drought, they can call constantly, but deliver no rain, so they can taunt the soul, or conversely, they can blot out the healing sun, delaying happy sunlight. Beautifully written, this tanka, you deserve good luck, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Roy, for the encouraging review.

reply by royowen on 08-Jul-2021
    Most welcome
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