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Fox and Felix Fine: First Case 5

a one-scene script with Fox and Felix

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Lol! Man, that "preposterous" is flying out of Felix's mouth now. I liked all the funny names that Felix comes up with for Sanders. I wonder why he agreed to pay...

Remember to pay the Fine's. (Fines)


 Comment Written 29-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
    Thanks for the review, Helen. I think I had ?...pay the Fine?s fee.? on there once. That?s my excuse ? this time.
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Like the character on the Little Rascals, maybe that is the only word he knows. If that is the case you might want to teach him some others. At least teach him how to respond to a slap across the lips and a shaddup! Delivered with purpose.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    Perhaps.
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Now I'm confused. I guess things will be straightened out in the next scene. It's only fair that Fox and Felix get to speak to Kitty. Sanders is acting rather strange. What about Kay and Kitty? are they the same person? I don't blame Fox and Felix for being concerned about getting paid. judi


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    I?m trying to create enough questions to require a lot of answers.
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I really like your dialogues. They bring the script to life. I can just hear their voices in my mind as they speak. This is the only part of your script I have read. Who is Trent?. He isn't on the list. Your script is excellent.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    In the previous scene, Kay and Trent struggled with the boys who were tracking the missing person, Kitty. Now there is a new wrinkle suggesting that Kay, who stabbed Felix with a knife, is lookalike for Kitty.

reply by Pj Dennison on 28-Jul-2021
    That is a new wrinkle. I know it is going to be excellent.
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I don't know what is going on beyond the mere basics, but I hope this helps.

notes:

Fox Kitty?
Fox: Kitty?

Sanders: How do you two expect to stay in business treating clients like this[?}

Fox: Where did you come from{?}


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    I must have had a blind spot for colons and question marks today. Thanks for the help.
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Clever bit! These two are quite the exasperating pair...
I sense a a bit of tomfoolery in this little bit of story...but still will look forward to reading the next "Episode"...glutton for pain that I am...


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Sherry, for giving these guys a look.
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