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Fox and Felix Fine: First Case 7

Solving the crime

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Bill,

Okay, hear me out. I have a graphic artist I work with who seems to be really good. (I've only used him once but plan to use him again.) And he's reasonable compared to others in the bus. Now, to make this work, I need you to well acquainted with Calvin and Hobbs for some reason....

Here's my order (in a perfect world). A graphic comic book - but on the lighter, childish (C&H) side. Not the darker adult side. Starting with the very beginning of the Pons and Ned series and include several of the 'plays' in each 'book'/novel/whatever. Just like the C&H books. I know they would be amazing. Just like the C&H books, once you start reading they are good... but as you keep reading, you DIE. I believe so much, I would even invest in the project. How about THAT?

And, of course, continue for Fox and Fine, etc.

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1.) My third wife's, second husband's, ex-wife's step-son as a matter of fact.
--> My third wife's second husband's ex-wife's step-son(,) as a matter of fact.

2.) Sanders: You two would probab(l)y be a match.

So - what's the excuse not to?


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
    Wow! That is a terrific idea and I am very interested in pursuing it. Thank you for your enthusiasm and great idea, Robyn.
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My head is swimming with all the identical twinning going on and the double dating and a knife-wielding hit-woman who seems to be her father's worst enemy. Just another day in the Fox and Felix agency! There is always something avant-garde and existential about your plays.


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
    Thanks, Jay, for taking a look. I?m sure I?ll get to a point soon.
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So the double date will be Kitty and Felix with Fox and Lois?? I am a bit confused but I'm glad that Sanders will pay their exorbitant fee and next we'll find out who the real villains are...


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    Let's hope so...
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I know, I know. All the PIs do it, but maybe it's best not to date those involved in a case, especially if you're having trouble telling who's who. Now we'll need to find out what Trent's story is. Must be a money motive. The actors would have a great time playing with the dialogue in this. judi


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    Felix is a caution and Fox will develope an ulcer before this is over. :)
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This is a fun play like a screwball comedy. Sometimes, I'm a little confused about who is dating who. I guess the person is always talking to the person who speaks before him/her. Am I right?

Well done otherwise.


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    I usually try to aim the dialogue at the intended party, but sometimes it slows the banter for a reader. Thank you for giving this a look.
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So, wait. Was this just a grand scheme to get paid and laid. Something is not adding up here. This seems to be about a bunch of people who resemble each other, and only they know who is who and they may or may not reveal to the non players just who the heck is who. Now I get it. Wait, no I do not get it. Aw hell!


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    Still building to the bigger story, nomi.
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The dialogues are funny and cheeky too. Finally they realised that if they want the truth they have to remove the gag. I liked the "my third wife's second husband's ex-wife's .....


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    Thank you, Sanku.
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These two are a bit off the wall when it comes to seriousness. Their conversation is so edgy. There always seems to be a hint of 'I dare you' in everything they say.

Ralf


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    Thank you, Ralf.
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Another great post, a like the way you weave an interesting script around these characters, and at the end, there's a funny little something going on here, all good characters, beautifully written Bill, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



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    Thanks, Roy.

reply by royowen on 16-Aug-2021
    Most welcome
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Sorry I'll have to play catch up (been away awhile) but I thoroughly enjoyed this as I tried to connect-I know all the characters and about this first case, another excellent script and read, very well written****kahpot

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 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    Thank you, kahpot.
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