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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Karen wth the Brown Eyes"

A first person story about various friends.

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Interesting that Karen turned out to be a girl you'd known in kindergarten. It must have added to her allure that she already had a boyfriend. Interesting turn of events that her mother wanted you to ask Karen out because she didn't like the boyfriend. Very interesting story, and the ending was great that this was the girl you married. judi


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021



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    Thanks, Judi. We made it ten years.

reply by judiverse on 17-Aug-2021
    You're welcome. Yes, I recall that you were divorced and then remarried. judi
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I seem to remember this love story. Maybe you revisied it slightly. But I do remerber the first sex, the same girl as young love, and the proposal and marriage. Anyway, it is story worth repeating.


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
    I may have mentioned this when writing about my friend Scratcher.
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Bill,

What a wonderful romantic. I love it! I can promise you the first guy I was ever with had no such qualms. YUCK. He just strung me along for four years - and only after we broke up did I discover he cheated on me the entire time. And get this. My MOTHER knew it the whole time. Hmmm...

How's that for solidarity?

Yup.

Annnnyhow. This was a better story. Thanks!


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021



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    We were both too immature to get married, but we made it ten years.
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This is a cool story. Are you still married to her? I had a Plymouth valiant which is pretty much like a Dodge Dart. I haven't been on in awhile so I'm not sure if I missed any of these I'll go back and take a look. Keep'em coming.


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    Thanks, Earl
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Bill,
What a wonderful true story! I love that you described love making in such a poignant, beautiful way. (Minus the uncomfortable part). You have such a vivid memory of your wife when your fledgling relationship was taking off.
Your writing is smooth, great, and it made me smile.
Best wishes for the contest, Bill.
Stay healthy!
Cindy


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2021



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    Thank you, Cindy. That was my first wife. We were married for ten years.
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What a tender love story. Especially the wheelbarrow part!

I recall it was Thusday, as that was bingo night at the community center. [You've been told already how to spell Thursday, unless you were trying to write Tuesday.]

She had also upgraded her glasses to wire frames, [Which begged the question, what are BC glasses?

I saw her once in her boyfriend's car. She came to my house. [It's unclear whether it was when she was in her boyfriend's car that she came to your house. It may be immaterial... but I was waiting for something to ignite between you and her boyfriend.

but I do endorse the sex whether in a car, boat, or wheelbarrow. [That is classic Bill Schott.


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



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    I guess I?m on a spelling rebellion. Hey! Rebelling spelling. There?s something there.
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Wow, I think that is a little ".kismetish, a very pointed post, you met in kindergarten, she was your first sexual experience? And after your "adventures" in boot camp you were married, well done, good sharing Bill, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



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    Thank you, Roy

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    Most welcome
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Very interesting. When young, people often hook up quickly. That was true decades or centuries ago and it is still true today. At the time we don't think too much on the speed and ease of ... well, entry, but later on when fires cool, it comes back. I guess we will see how this story continues.


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



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    Thanks for giving this a look, Lance.
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This sounds so familiar. When I arrived in Okinawa at age 18, I was already no longer a virgin. So, I quickly adapted to being in a place where sex was as easy and available as a drink of water. However, there were many young and some not all that young, who upon getting their first piece, fell in love and wanted to marry the one who gave them their first sex. This almost never works out well. On very rare occasions it works out, but that is not the norm. You, no doubt came to learn this very same lesson.


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



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    I tolerated a lot for ten years then moved on.
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It appears that you lucked out when her mother asked you to ask her out.
There seems to be something that kept drawing you together that you were not aware of. But, yes, it was meant to be.

Ralf


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
    Thanks, Ralf, for this great review. Bill
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