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A student gets a bit too creative.

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This is hilarious. You've written a creative 100 word story rich with realistic dialogue and imagery. Your artwork pairs perfectly with the story. Best wishes in the contest.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    Thankyou so much for the review and comments. I'm so glad you found it funny.
    Beth.
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You never know what goes on in a Childs mind unless you keep the avenues of communication open at all times. How embarrassing for this mother. She should have tossed the gag gift from the get-go. HAHA Well done Beth! Good luck. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the review. I know I would have been too embarassed to even go get it. LOL
    Beth
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Hahahaha, Beth. This was just too funny. She certainly used her imagination and got very creative. That it is actually based on reality makes is even better. I love your flash, and I hope you'll do very well in the contest. It's surely a winner. I'm still laughing. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    Thank you Ulla. It looks like you found this as funny as I did when my friend told me about it. Thank so much for the six stars.
    Beth

reply by Ulla on 28-Aug-2021
    It's hilarious.
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Once at our school, a child brought a scale that is used to weigh illegal drugs. I'm not kidding. The parent never came to pick it up. Thank you for sharing this contest entry. You have all the elements a story needs in this short story. I enjoyed reading and I want to wish you good luck.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the review and comments. I imagine children manage to shock their teachers sometimes. I like the new picture you are using.
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What a great way to start off my day. I've laughed until my stomach hurts and about choked on my tongue. Flash fiction doesn't get any better than this. I just wish I had a six to reward it properly. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    Thank you, Ric. I wasn't sure how people would react to this, but most seem to find it as funny as I did when my friend told me what her daughter had done.

reply by Ric Myworld on 28-Aug-2021
    There isn't anyone who wouldn't have found this hilarious other than judgmental people, and those types need to be ignored anyway. LOL. Have a wonderful weekend, Beth!
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You're the best! This is absolutely hilarious. I can just imagine the look on the teacher's face when she brought this to school.
You gave me a broad smile with this one.
It's a win, win.
Best of luck in the contest.
My best,
Marie


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    I so glad you like this. I got a big laugh when my firend told me what happened. She was so embarrassed. I don't think she ever told her daughter she was too busy to help her again. Thank so much for the six stars.
    Beth
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That is hilarious! I can just imagine how that mother must have felt! I bet the teachers had a bit of a giggle in the staff room. That was a fabulous 100 word flash fiction, Beth, I couldn't help but laugh! (Not that I know what it was, of course!!!) Good luck in the contest, my friend. Sandra xxx


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    Thank you Sandra. Of course we'd like to say we are as ignorart as the child as to what it was. One reviewer seemed to believe it was to massage sore muscles, but so far the rest know what it was.
    Beth

reply by sandramitchell on 28-Aug-2021
    LOL!!! Oh, dear, she must live a very protected life! Lol xx
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Parents should always pay attention to their children and never neglect their homework assignments. Lol.
"Oh, what a funny wand Mommy and Daddy were keeping in the bedroom! I wonder what it was for?"
"I'm sure it was very good for massaging sore muscles. Yes, we should return that right away, or your parents will miss it."
That's very funny, Beth. I wonder how old your friend's daughter was, and if she was old enough to suspect the true purpose of the vibrator.

Great little story.

My husband and I were once visiting friends, when their little daughter came running out of the bedroom of their small apartment, waving a (thankfully, unused) tampon, exclaiming, "Look what I found!"
The object was removed, and the clueless child had no idea why no one shared her excitement.
Yes, there are so many exciting things to explore in a child's world, aren't there!


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
    On funniest home videos I saw two little boys who found a tampon. The thought it was an explosive and they wanted to light the string and watch it explode. Thanks so much for the review and comments.
    Beth

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 30-Aug-2021
    An "exploding tampon," or so they thought -- that is too funny! I guess they never lit the string, because they could have started a fire, though obviously not an explosion!
    My husband would have been on the floor, laughing. For some reason, he seems to find extraordinary humor in anything related to the female anatomy.
    You're very welcome, as always.
    Love and prayers, Mary Kay xoxo
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My what a great one hundred words. Telling us a true story. I can image the surprised look on your friends face. I just wonder what the expression was on the girl's face.
Best to you in the contest.
Gert


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
    Thank you Gert. I'm so glad you liked this and gave me six stars. I have feeling the little girl didn't get to find out why her show and tell was canceled. She had no idea what she had found and I doubt if my friend told her. She knew it had a switch and vibrated whe turned on.

reply by Gert sherwood on 27-Aug-2021
    You are welcome Beth
    Gert
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Oh, yeah, the humiliation would be at the top of the list, and admitting to owning it would need a lot of explanations tagged to it. Few would believe the 'gag gift lie, I am afraid. Very cute and well done. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
    Yeah, I found it a little hard to swallow too, but I don't doubt a kid would be able to find something like that hidden away. My own daughter found a pack of condoms in a drawer. Opened them and came and told me she had found the perfect raincoat for her Barbie.
    My son thought they were balloons.
    Beth

reply by Begin Again on 27-Aug-2021
    LOL
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