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Writermom
 
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Broken Homes
Hey there!

I like the new ending to this one. I kept reading it and knew there was something about the other ending that bothered me, but couldn't figure it out. This works!

Developers are in it for the money, they don't care who actually lives in the places they build...unless of course they are too poor to pay. It's a sad state of affairs.

nice write, David!

Dawn :o)


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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Hiya Marillion and welcome back (can't remember if I said it or not) I think you did an excellent job with this one, the title alone tells so much. Tearing down someone home can cause so much heartache.

Nicely done.


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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CaseyMezera
 
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An emotional one my friend. And how it so spells true. It seems this world was built not for the toilers as suggests in the bible, but for those who reap what others sow.


Casey


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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Donaya Haymond
 
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Very poignant - I know I say that a lot when I talk about your writing, but it so often is! This is a humanistic, caring, compassionate look on this everyday tragedy.


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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Great poem. Your message of the poor and under privileged falling prey to the all mighty dollar was clear and concise. It seems as though the rich always seem to get what they desire and often at the expense of the ones who can least afford it. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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The cost is high for such exclusive housing, but those who live there never think about what it took to build their palaces. Great work, Marillion.


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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A great commentary on gentrification, my friend. I'm seeing this in my town, as well. So many people are being uprooted for the sake of expensive housing.


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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"We'll have attractive downtown housing soon,"
as sculpted brick replaces haggard wood
and ghetto dust becomes elitist air.

What a brilliant line, Marillion, to really end with a flourish. Great stuff, my friend.


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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This is absolutely stunning work, my friend. COngrats on a triumph in form and in content. You set the bar here, and all are woefully short of your poetic heights.


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Awesome work, bro, showing exactly how much different kinds of topics you can write about. I'm amazed that you can write something as madcap as MVP and then something as wrenching as this.


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