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Salad Shooter
 
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Broken Homes
Awesome piece, David! Send it in to the local newspaper in a letter to the editor.

Tell me if they publish it.

I would, if I were editor-in-chief.



 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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Very heartfelt work pointing out what is a common and evill tendancy in this county . . .can you say Trail of Tears? Thanks, Marillion, for your terrific and thought provoking write, as usual. Now, where's Zeus when we need him? Thunderbolts through the rich windows, incinerating everything sounds good to me! Cyndee


 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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Excellent, well-crafted piece of writing, Marillion--such great wording that's powerful and evocative. You've given this reader clear images and food for thought. Solid as ever; thanks for sharing.

Sincerely,
LarkSong

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 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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This is a sad story. I didn't think you were going to be able to pull this on off, but it read as smoothly as one might hope for. Nice work. Best of luck to you. I can remember walking through Virginia Beach, VA in the late sixties and finding street after street of tar paper shacks on bricks with plastic in the windows. Now they're gone, replaced with something newer and ugly, also.

Good writing,

Larry

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 Comment Written 15-May-2006


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Sanctuary

You humble me! When I read your easily flowing words, you make a writer shy to write. I envy you, for sure!

It's so nice to come back for a breather and get a bit of the good one. Just nice to have you back, kiddo. So nice!


 Comment Written 13-May-2006


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ScarletAffliction
 
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Monumental Pain

What line can I reprint for you that would be my favorite? I can't pick a single one that would stand out more than the rest. I absolutely loved it. Not a thing is missing. Not a word or a notion or an image...it's perfect. I intend to share it with others and give full credit of course to my great friend who is one of the finest poets alive and scribbling today. ;)

Mel



 Comment Written 13-May-2006


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Eminently wonderful, poignant, and fascinating. I hope a lot of veterans read this. Your mechanics are, as ever, perfect, and the content could not be better.


 Comment Written 03-May-2006


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Wow what an excellent poem this is David. Your use of imagery is, as always, superb, for example, "oily skies above Kuwaiti sands." The rhythm and rhyme scheme are well constructed. Well done.


 Comment Written 03-May-2006


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The sounds and images survive the years
in those who were, or just beyond, their teens
when they were shipped, still wet behind the ears,
to live or die in those horrific scenes

This poem says it all. It is great and yet the subject is one that reminds us of pain and sorrow. The stanza about hold my heart. Teens, bearly old enough to drive a vote, not old enought drink but sent to war. Very insightful piece. Missy


 Comment Written 03-May-2006


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And somehow the pictures made never capture the real image of young teenagers who have suddenly been give adult responsibilities. I had three brothers in WWII --lost one who had survived Omaha Beach only to be killed by friendly fire at St. Lo; one served in Germany in the tank corp; and the youngest signed up (with my parents permission) when he was just 17 years old and spent three years in the South Pacific on a destroyer. Thank you for remembering those who served and are serving.


 Comment Written 02-May-2006


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