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a poem

  18 total reviews 
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Mary Vigasin
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Just when I think I can recognize your sometimes quirky style, you blow me away with this poignant poem of difficult life in a one-room apartment most likely in poverty but having hope that things will get better.
Your talent shines here brightly and brilliantly.
Regards,
Mary


 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
    You are very kind, Mary.
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This is a dark, but deep and satisfying poem, Bill. Wow! "A Sudden sawing light," and
My crazy eye snaps open
as if to catch a ride on a ray
out of this dark and lonely place.

What gave it a special deep dark turn was the use of the word "beatings" and yet the lingering glimmer of hope riding on the desire/need to see tomorrow.

Good stuff, man!


 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
    Thanks, Jay.
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Your poem is nice about what someone sees when they get up and their mental and physical state gets them off and running or lay back down until another time.
The colors you used are bright and warm. Good luck with your poem.


 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
    Thanks, AisA4u
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The author's words are sad, descriptive, hopeful and creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem and I thought about how lonely life can be.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is great and goes well
with these words.


 Comment Written 01-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
    Thank you, Harmony
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Janice Canerdy
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This is a vividly descriptive poem--especially the "crazy eye" lines! I started to feel great sympaty for the severely roughed-up man--but I don't know what happened. :-)


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Thanks, Janice
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Gert sherwood
 
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a poem
City
Bill Schott your poem it seems that you don't know why a city is depressed, but hoping in the future ----
when the sun rises,
and the city wakes from its sleeplessness,
Gert


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Thanks, Gert

reply by Gert sherwood on 31-Aug-2021
    you are welcome Bill Schott
    Gert
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I was wondering why it was a "sudden sawing" light other than the alliteration. But as the poem progresses, it's clear that life in the city is hard and a full accurate depth perception of the future requires the "crazy eye's" optimism to be balanced by the beaten eye's reality.


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Thank you, lyenochka
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Sally Law
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I rough week for American citizens and I'm feeling this way today. I dreaded getting up to read the Afghanistan report, and sure enough, it was as suspected. Americans left behind and betrayed. Those poor Afghans, too. Then the hurricane damage....
I have taken to prayer and hope to make a difference there and in my writing. Sending you my best today as always. I hope you and yours are well and safe.
Sal XO


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Thanks, Sal. Prayers from here for you and yours too.
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I am impressed with this, Bill. So unusual for you. You have captured the depression of living in the city and walking the mean streets, afraid, but still hoping for a way out. Well done my friend. You should get serious more often. Nancy:)


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Thank you, Nancy.
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Sir, I do not know who you are, but you need to release my friend Bill Schott. You can not get away with trying to pass yourself off as my friend. Believe me, he is recognizable by his unique style of writing, and you will never convince any of his friends and cowriters that this came from him. Nice try, better luck next time. Now, please release our friend or else.


 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021



reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
    Do not attempt to adjust your dial?
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