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The Mayor of Sweet-Town


(And the moral of the story is...)

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Rosemary Everson1
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This is a very cute poem about children and Halloween. The mayor can be a little mysterious sometimes. The one in your poem was like the Scrooge, that we hear about at Christmas time.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
    Yes, he was, but a toothache can definitely make you grouchy! Ha! Ha! Thank you so much for the great review of The Mayor of Sweet-Town... I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful evening!
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This children's poem, The Mayor of Sweet-Town, is a fun romp with the mean mayor through the haunted evening on his way to his Halloween miracle. Neat.


 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
    Hi, Bill! Thank you so much for reviewing The Mayor of Sweet-Town! I'm so happy you enjoyed! Have a wonderful day!
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Katie Mae Dead
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Yay! It ends with a health lesson. That's always good for children! This is so delightful and would work well as a children's story-in-a-poem. The characters are engaging and the poem moves along well. I love the picture you found by the way.
Best wishes in the contest.
Katiemae Dead


 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
    Hi, Katie Mae! Thank you so much for the wonderful review; I'm so happy that you enjoyed and thought it would be a good one for a children's story-in-a-poem... with lesson at the end! Thank you so much and have a beautiful evening!
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I enjoyed your clever children's poem. It rhymes nicely and has great imagery. I'm sure that children will love it. It reminds me a little of the story about the lion with a thorn in it's paw. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
    Hi, Mary! Thanks so much for the wonderful review - I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Have a beautiful day!

reply by Mary Shifman on 20-Sep-2021
    You are welcome.
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You made me smile here with this children's write and you used just the right amount of horror for a child to enjoy, a fun post and a pleasure to read this inventive story, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
    Thank you so much, Dolly, for the lovely review! I'm so happy it made you smile and that you felt that children would enjoy! Thanks again and have a wonderful week!
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Paul McFarland
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Nice children's poem with a nice ending and message about dental care. I thought "contemptuous" was a little too much for the young kiddies. but you should do okay in the contest.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
    I do need to go back and re-write that line... totally agree with you on that! Thanks so much for your feedback and I'm so happy you enjoyed The Mayor of Sweet-Town!
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This is a really sweet story and told quite well with a nice surprise ending. If you mean it to be read by children, the (. . .) isn't a good idea. The only line I question if the "who" in line 4. It just doesn't work. Good job and it might get published if you pick your market carefully.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
    Thanks so much for your feedback! I'm so happy you enjoyed The Mayor of Sweet-Town! I'll definitely go back and take a look at your suggestions!
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I bet you had fun writing this reimagined tale of the misguided grinchy mayor. i'm glad we got past his bad mood and a violent attack to the fun times and the moral of the story, which tied it together well.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
    Thanks so much for the great review, LisaMay! It was fun to write and I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Thanks again!
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SHABAMO
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This is a very clever and well written redux of the original grinch, put into the terminology and time of Halloween instead of Christmas. Best of luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
    Thanks so much for the wonderful review; I'm so happy that you enjoyed my take on the Grinch Who Stole Christmas! It was a fun piece to write... Thank you once more and have a wonderful evening!
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This was so adorable. Good for children 5 to 80 (smile). Amazing Halloween imagery, visuals and presentation.

Nice occasional rhyming.
It was a pleasure to read .

Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
    Thanks so much for the great review and am so happy it made you smile :) Thanks again and have a wonderful evening!
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