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The Quarterback from Mt. Olympus

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Lisloh
 
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Barbs and Carbs
Smile...:) LOL....

See here---I knew he'd come back stormin' and fumin'....
Then there's Hera, smiting him still---too funny...
Loved the 'fell in' line... perfect.

Then we have Herc---portrayed as a dense Neanderthal---oh, how far will you go David...?...:)

Now---back to the game....
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

Excellent presentation!
Love the enjambment---good show!


 Comment Written 20-May-2006


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Swtdreamz
 
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Barbs and Carbs
He was dispatched by mighty Heracles
who's working out, uprooting redwood trees - herakles- a favorite among myths- cool- you're into greek mythology as well
the ground, which Hera finds amusing since
he's not her son (she says he's just as dense - oo hera the jealous one
A thunder-clap disturbs the mountain air,
and Zeus re-enters with a molten stare - ah his famous thunder bolts
good job


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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sharon fallis
 
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Barbs and Carbs
What a wonderful poem you have written in 'prose' form. I remember the very first one you wrote. Love them. They are so funny and realistic. Just change the names and they coul be one of todays 'footballers'. Very good word usage. Great visuals and what a wonderful imagery. Thank you for sharing. Sharon


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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pen pal
 
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Just Between Gods
Another great chapter
I like the rhyming in your work its not as easy as it looks
well done you really do have a clever nack with words
would love to read more from you
kind regards


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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pen pal
 
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When the God's Away
Hi again

I like the title of this one and the content too.
very funny especially the third verse
I am sure that this book when complete will be a hit
well done


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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pen pal
 
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Dropped Passes and Potential Wives
Hi yah
Yes a very interesting story here.
You mention mums' a lot (and there is nothing wrong with that)
I really enjoy the humour your bring to fanstory
good on you


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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Barbs and Carbs
Hi there
wow you have a wonderful imagination
This would make a good movie for the kids (big and small)
Nice to see a bit of fun work by someone who tries not to take life to seriously
Well done
We are all works in progress just some more completed than others (LOL)

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 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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Donaya Haymond
 
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Barbs and Carbs
Ah, those Olympus gods. Notoriously immature. It's nice that they're not killing humans like they did during the Trojan War, anyway, though this battle is starting to feel similar. Write on!


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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AmokMuse
 
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I always thought Herc was a dork. And here you've painted such a good description of the "boi" LOL Again, a wonderful chapter in, what is by far, my favorite comedy of the moment. I learn so much just by reading your stuff :-) Cyndee


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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CaseyMezera
 
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"who's working out, uprooting redwood trees"

Loved this line and the rest of the poem. great comedy which, for me, is a bit different read than your more serious stuff.

Casey


 Comment Written 19-May-2006


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