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Scene at a Croquet Game 2

a script with Pons and Ned

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Bill,

I always adore these. It's probably something really wrong in my makeup - but I shan't try to have it fixed. hahahaha This was a lot of fun - moving on!


 Comment Written 11-Jan-2022


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    Thanks, Robyn. They?re therapy for me.
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Even with a cast of characters list it's hard to keep these guys apart since their names are all so close together. Are you still working on your novel? Stay safe and stay healthy in the new year.


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Earl. Their names are similar as a joke. I almost had one named Jedi.
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Hi Bill, so Pons and Ned are back. That's great. I can't wait to see where you're taking this. Nothing much really happens in this scene, so I'm expecting there will be many more. I hope so. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Ulla. Just getting this big cast off the ground.
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This is a very good write. But I think it could use a little more twist and turns. Despite the fact, I still think your a good writer. And if you persevere...your going to make it, if you haven't already. Keep Writing. And hope to see you stop by my spot, to enjoy some of my poetry. Stay Connected


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022
    Thanks, BT. You?re right, there is no action yet. This will be about ten scenes.

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    No problem. And it's good to know you. And you can click on the following music link, if you wanna know more about who I am. And what I
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Things must be heating up because I am already sweating. As to the possibility of Ned's head being replaced, have they never heard of a knuckle head? This term Knuckle head seems to be an appropriate description and application for most of the participants in fact.


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2022


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    They are a piece of work.
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Good to see Ned and Pons back!
Watch out, Zed, if you don't have any lines, you need to stay clear of D-Red!
I don't know how to play croquet so I will learn from your play.


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Helen. It is a dainty lawn game.

reply by lyenochka on 07-Jan-2022
    I remember from the Disney cartoon of Alice in Wonderland. Just never played...
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I haven't thought about croquet games in years. I wasn't even sure it was still around. We used to play It in the yard sometimes. That was many years ago. This is cute and nicely done. Great work.


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022


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    Thank you, PBB
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This is so funny :"Hed:
(to GED grinning) If Ned's head were to be replaced with a croquet ball -- Hmm? That may have already happened.

GED:
(to Hed) That seems unlikely for many reasons, to include human flesh and wood not being in the least bit interchangeable." I don't know how did you come up with these ideas:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Iza
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Your scripts take some concentration. Can you have an unlimited number of players in a croquet game? It seems a shame to be called home in the middle of a game. How can your characters relax with Ded around?


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
    Ded and Dred are invisible to everyone except Ned.
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Your scripts take some concentration. Can you have an unlimited number of players in a croquet game? It seems a shame to be called home in the middle of a game. How can your characters relax with Ded around?


 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
    Ded and Dred are invisible to everyone except Ned.
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