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I Woke Up a Little Different


Someone Else

  5 total reviews 
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Tom Horonzy
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Creative. Humorous. Imaginative. I cannot think of any princess you missed save for the Cruise line. You are deserving of votes. Nice job. x n m n b v c nb m to get to 150 characters


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2022



reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
    Thank you. Giggle giggle. I love your method of reaching fifty characters. May I borrow it?
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Hi there,

This gave me a good chuckle this drab, grey afternoon! lol It's very well written and the voice in the piece is very appealing.

I would suggest removing the speech marks from the very beginning. They aren't closed off again. As it's written in first person narrative you don't really need them. if you do use them though you'll need to have them at the start of every relayed paragraph and one final set of closing ones at the very end.

How many times does someone have to try to kill you before you figure out the meaning of "stranger danger".- this may need a question mark.

All the best
GMG


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    Thank you. I shall correct that immediately.
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An excellent entry for the - Someone Else - writing contest.
This story has so many funny bits.
I loved the referencing to all the female Disney princess characters and co, the Snoop Dog and singing Ha-ha-ha-ha and laddy da da, and attacking birds (I laughed out loud to that part), deer in window and rabbits and squirrels started dancing on the dresser - I had fun visualising that bit.
Another funny bit with you being a dreadlocks person with a complexion that is more milk chocolate than dark chocolate.
Man, I don't envy your waking nightmare but I'm happy to shower a six on you for sharing it and making me laugh with this entertaining read.
Best of luck!


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    Thank you so much for the fabulous review. I am so happy you enjoyed it. Thank you for the specifics of what you enjoyed. It helps me to understand what an audience enjoys. Here's hoping you never have to suffer the indignities of a Disney princess. I don't think the perks are worth the trouble.

reply by PoemsOfDD on 20-Jan-2022
    You must have a wand somewhere in your princess frock. You might want to give that a wave? lol :-) Thanks again for the laugh and you are welcome for the sixers.
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LisaMay
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What a dilemma!! You've covered the princess's pretty well - obviously very knowledgable due to being a parent. (I've been spared - no kids.)
I enjoyed your humour. Your wife is certainly going to be surprised!


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    Thank you. I must confess I was a Disney princess fan long before the children came along. I am also a lover of fairy tales. The horrifyingly authentic ones meant to scare adults straight and the revised, more mellow versions for teaching lessons and entertainment.
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:-) There's not much to say except that this is hilarious. Your knowledge of Princesses is awesome. (I'm a daddy to two boys, so I'm more comfortable with Marvel characters). This was well devised and extremely enjoyable to read. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022



reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    Thank you. I'm also a whiz on Marvel characters thanks to my husband. Can't get enough Deadpool and X-Men. Glad you enjoyed it though.
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