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My Brother's Second Senryu for the Potlatch Club Event

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Theodore McDowell
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Tell your brother he did an amazing job, Katherine. I love the photograph and the nostalgia that underlies and inundates the poem. Well done. You should be proud.


 Comment Written 19-Mar-2022

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Obviously, you knew a good poem when you saw this one. I hope he will see my review.
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This poignant poem will do what poetry is supposed to do, stir emotions. The reader is invited to identify with the poet. The reader may even remember thongs or events they'd forgotten. This is a perfect theme. A+ work


 Comment Written 18-Mar-2022

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That was wonderful and creative, and I loved the photos!

I just wonder why your brother wouldn't join the site and write with his own name. He obviously has an ability to write, and everyone is welcome to this writing community!

Thank you for posting this and sharing your story with us.


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
    Waking up to all these reviews was so exciting! Feedback is a gift and today was like Christmas! Thanks for your valued words.
    I can't commit to joining the site, as I already have a more than full schedule of my own interests. I just wanted to dabble in my sister's passion for a few days whilst we're together to get a feel for how she spends her time. G.
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I love looking through old photos. I must have a million of them now that my mother is gone and I have all of hers. They can bring back memories of things we've forgotten, and for a moment, we can relive that time. I enjoyed this very much.


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
    Thank you. All these reviews have been so exciting! Feedback is a gift and today was like Christmas! G
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Very charming. It has the correct 5-7-5 syllable count. It is a delight to view those old photographs. They bring back such memories of childhood friends. I don't know why, but rhyme seems to be a requirement for poems in the short poems contests these days, and this has it. It reminds me old of family pictures I have. judi


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
    Waking up to all these reviews has been so exciting! Feedback is a gift and today and yesterday was like Christmas! Thanks for your valued opinions. I know a Senryu shouldn't rhyme, but I wrote from my heart here. G
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Kate,

Nice! Please tell your brother I appreciated this piece - is that a family image? Either way, it reminds me so much of my own long-gone childhood days. What fun!!! Thank you - tell him we said, MORE!


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
    Waking up to all these reviews was so exciting! Feedback is a gift and yesterday was like Christmas! Thanks for your valued words. The photo was of me (no shirt) with my two mates, over forty years ago. G
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I can't count the number of times I have looked at old photos and had wonderful memories of the time shared with the people in them, most of whom I have seen in decades. This senryu describes those moments to a tee. Great job, Brother.


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
    The last couple of days with all these reviews have been like Christmas! I am really grateful for all these gifts of feedback. Thankyou! G.

reply by Susan Newell on 19-Mar-2022
    You are most welcome.
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Your brother has written an excellent senryu. It has the flavor of the old days when boys could go with their shirts off and pose for a picture in a joyful pose. Their friendship is obvious and their camaraderie shows. How wonderful to have such joy at an early age,
Thanks for bringing back the old days when we could romp and play the day away.
Take good care of each other,
Jesse


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
    The last couple of days with all these reviews have been like Christmas! I am really grateful for all these gifts of feedback. I also thought it was wonderful to grow up in those good old days. G.

reply by Jesse James Doty on 19-Mar-2022
    I am wishing all the best for your ailing parents. I know this is a hard time for both of you. The good old days were a wonderful diversion for a while.
    Happier days will be ahead,
    Jesse
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A brilliant senryu about an old photograph . Looking at old photographs reall takes us on a journey down the memory lane.A time we were really happy .your brother's first attempt is very impressive.


 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
    The last couple of days with all these reviews have been like Christmas! I am really grateful for all these gifts of feedback. Thank you! G.
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For a first poem, rather Haiku or Senryu (thanks for the distinction between the two), your brother has written a thoughtful poem. Itt expresses an appreciation for memories of the past.


 Comment Written 16-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
    Waking up to all these reviews was so exciting! Feedback is a gift and today was like Christmas! Thanks for your valued opinions. G
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